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Idle in the Isles |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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~*~ Time fades in and out idle in the isles wading in knee deep cooling off and unprotected by the elements deemed by fate. Glistening in the frost misty in the moonlight passing clouds across my eyes drawing circles around rainbows blending colors in descant. My heart beats loudly to the sound and the hush of whispered voices playing a melody outside my window waltzing in the wind holding stars up in the sky. Hitting a pitch that leaves me lonely outgrowing my own shadow that never learned to dance or cared enough to move me like you moved me. ~*~ |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"Hitting a pitch that leaves me lonely outgrowing my own shadow" Nice image! Thank you for sharing this poem. |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Great poem! Grover. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
very nice Blues...loved the last stanza... jwesley |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
i need to be moved again too  love that blonde  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Oh, I like this one, lady! *S* From the title through the fantastic finish... excellent work. *S* |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Hitting a pitch that leaves me lonely outgrowing my own shadow that never learned to dance or cared enough to move me like you moved me. You tug bluesy...I think I can feel this so much, because I know it so much..poignant but beautiful. It's better than I could have planned.. |
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sea_of_okc Senior Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 568Oklahoma City, OK, USA |
I have to agree, that last stanza is awesome. |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Lori, I love it all, as always, but this verse really stood out to me........ My heart beats loudly to the sound and the hush of whispered voices playing a melody outside my window waltzing in the wind holding stars up in the sky. Hugs, my friend  Ethel |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
It sounds so pretty there that I almost called up a travel agent this morning~~~ sighing~~wishing I could hugs M |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Oh you do have a voice worth hearing....This one got me Lori. Your imagery here is clean and invitingly fresh. Thanks for it. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"Hitting a pitch that leaves me lonely outgrowing my own shadow that never learned to dance or cared enough to move me like you moved me." Wonderful write Lori... you have way of pulling the reader in.. Excellent! Hugs~
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
I echo Nancy, you do have that way about you....so enjoyable! hugssss pretty lady ~~**~~ |
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