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Crow's Wings [haiku]
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Crow's Wings [haiku] |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
A snowy dawn, through frosted window pane; crow's wings passing. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
I see the scene ... black on white. Nicely penned. Love, Margherita  |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Paul~ Such a pleasurable read ... always~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
I remembered this from this morning and wanted to be sure to tell you how much I enjoyed your haiku. A crow has a lot of symbolism, doesn't it? A lot was said in just few words. Excellent Sadie |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Very nice! Grover. |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Looking out my window picturing your scene! Very, very nice .... hugs, Marti I take no credit for my poems. Although I write them, I feel |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Nicely penned...saw it... jwesley |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
-------------------------------------------------------------------------------- A snowy dawn, through frosted window pane; crow's wings passing. shatter the glass the world is dying the eyes of apathy watch from the window (dont ask me why that just came out) |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Reminded me of stanza from a poem by William Cullen Bryant, The Death of the Flowers The melancholy days have come, the saddest of the year, Of wailing winds, and naked woods, and meadows brown and sere; Heaped in the hollows of the grove, the autumn leaves lie dead; They rustle to the eddying gust, and to the rabbit's tread; The robin and the wren are flown, and from the shrubs the jay, And from the wood-top calls the crow through all the gloomy day. Nice work, J |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
nicely done Paul~ you do these well....and each is a treasure! ~~**~~ |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
there is so much complexity in this seemingly simple write...and thatis the beauty of a truly well-written haiku...nicely done |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Excellent! I watch the crows often from my perch by the patio door. Today I had the pleasure of watching one and then two appear to be on the pinnacle of the same branch. Then they separately flew away. No snow here today, praise God, just a gray sky and a gentle rain. The barren trees are burnt and raw umber jutting their lacey filigree toward the heavens. I enjoyed your poem extremely...you see it caused me to wax poetic about "my own" crows.  Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
sounds like the "end" hopefully only of the winter... |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Nice, Choshi! |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
how about... crow's wings shadow frosted window pane snowy dawn just a thought, lucky Speaking of ghosts, wouldn't you know here comes mine again... |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
lovely image. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big angel hugs) Awwwwwwwww, I just love the visions you paint with your words, sweet friend, God Bless You, this is a gem, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Paul, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
how about... crow's wings shadow frosted window pane snowy dawn just a thought, lucky Speaking of ghosts, wouldn't you know here comes mine again... ~Rosemary J. Gwaltney~ Hey, Rosemary, Your 'ghost' is welcome anytime, so good to see you...I like what you did with this one....very crisp. ~P |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
I remembered this from this morning and wanted to be sure to tell you how much I enjoyed your haiku. A crow has a lot of symbolism, doesn't it? A lot was said in just few words. Excellent Sadie Thanks Sadie, yes, lots of symbolism for sure....can frighten me at times...~P |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
A snowy dawn, through frosted window pane; crow's wings passing. shatter the glass the world is dying the eyes of apathy watch from the window (dont ask me why that just came out) "Y" is a crooked letter  Keep ;etting it flow...you always do so beautifully ~P |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Nicely penned...saw it... jwesley Thanks JW...I like that you saw it....~P |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
I see the scene ... black on white. Nicely penned. Love, Margherita Thank you Margherita, no shades of gray with these crows of winter...~P |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Paul~ Such a pleasurable read ... always~ *Huglets* Thank you Marge, back ~P |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Very nice! Grover. Thank you Grover... ~P |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Looking out my window picturing your scene! Very, very nice .... hugs, Marti Thank you Marti... back ~P |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Reminded me of stanza from a poem by William Cullen Bryant, The Death of the Flowers Thank you Jamie, for sharing this powerful poem....he really does fill in the details poignantly ~P |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
nicely done Paul~ you do these well....and each is a treasure! ~~**~~ Thank you Greeneyed Poetess |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
there is so much complexity in this seemingly simple write...and that is the beauty of a truly well-written haiku...nicely done Thankyou Steven R |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
I enjoyed your poem extremely...you see it caused me to wax poetic about "my own" crows. Thank you VAS, I very much enjoyed your images of crows...~P |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
sounds like the "end" hopefully only of the winter... I agree Dawn, hopefully!!! |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Nice, Choshi! Thank you Jo |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
lovely image. Much appreciated Nan....~P |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Noah, Thank you so much for your kindness and for your blessings.... ~P |
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