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Wicced_Witch
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since 2000-02-06
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Clarksville, TN, USA

0 posted 2004-02-20 02:00 AM


The defensive wall has broken.
No more protective shield.
Nothing left to stop it.
The power will not yield.

I feel so exposed now,
so out in the open,
watching it get closer,
waiting for it to happen.

Will it be pain free?
How long will it last?
I'm not sure I can handle
the powerful blast.

There is nothing I can do,
not sure I want to hide.
I won't show that I am scared.
I have to much pride.

It is almost here now.
I think I will surrender.
It's stronger than I thought,
this love I feel for her.

All critism is welcome, feel free to hurt my feelings.  You know, I've noticed I dont like my writing as well as I did when I was younger.  I'll repost an old poem I had here a few years ago so everyone can see the difference.

© Copyright 2004 Stephanie Elliott - All Rights Reserved
Richy
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since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050

1 posted 2004-02-20 06:08 AM




"A Heart Surrenders"

"Surrender My Heart"

"All Is Fair"


"A Wall No More"

Enjoyed The Poem!






A Romantic Heart
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since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496
Forever In Your Heart
2 posted 2004-02-20 06:15 AM


"Love Exposed"

"Exposure"

"Love's Release"

Great poem, I agree with Richy, my first thoughts were "A Heart's Surrender"

Open your eyes, open your mind, open your heart, let me come in and show you love.....~ARH

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