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Jamie
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0 posted 2004-02-19 10:14 PM



Your words stream by
like summer rains in
a desert arroyo
deep in the flow I pan
for gold – swirling each
syllable again and again
in search of those that
don’t speak merely to fools
who drown in pyrite dreams
seeking that one nugget
worth its weight
in happiness

© Copyright 2004 Jamie Patterson - All Rights Reserved
Grover
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1 posted 2004-02-19 10:19 PM


Tightly woven words of gold... excellent writing skills! Grover.
Dark Angel
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2 posted 2004-02-21 02:09 AM


Wow Jamie, I feel the ache in this.

amazing you are

keeping it.

Mee Mee

Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder.
(by Virginia Woolf)

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3 posted 2004-02-21 02:46 AM


this is gorgeous!
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4 posted 2004-02-21 11:37 AM


Jamie~
Thoughts of pure gold for sure~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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5 posted 2004-02-21 11:44 AM


so, it's not that you say it, it's how you say it?

always cool, J.

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6 posted 2004-02-21 01:06 PM




(big angel hugs) Oh Jamie, this is just beautiful, sweet friend, it is not the value of the gold that matters but how it shines from the golden heart of a loved one! (smiles) May the smiles always cascade and reflect from this treasure trove of love, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jamie, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

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7 posted 2004-02-21 01:31 PM


Wonderful work Jamie!!
Jamie
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8 posted 2004-02-23 12:03 PM


Thanks for the nice comments everyone. It is really appreciated.

J

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

Dark Angel
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9 posted 2004-02-23 03:19 PM


Do you know how much I LOVE this?....very much.

Had to have another read

M

Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder.
(by Virginia Woolf)

LeeJ
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10 posted 2004-02-23 04:32 PM


in search of those that
don’t speak merely to fools
who drown in pyrite dreams
seeking that one nugget
worth its weight
in happiness

in this verse I see someone who values her worth, your in love with her mind, as well as body and spirit...that is a golden nugget my friend!  Beautiful!

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11 posted 2004-02-23 08:39 PM


Great poem.  I love the analogy!
          Sadie

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12 posted 2004-02-23 08:44 PM


Jamie, I love the way you wrote this!!
Ethel

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13 posted 2004-02-24 01:18 AM


Loyalty - it's a hard (very hard) thing to find these days Jamie. People come and go, and come and go, and come and go again - but you....well, you are always there.

My rock.

Thank you.

K

Jamie
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14 posted 2004-02-24 11:27 AM


Thanks again everyone... and

So is trust, K. Though I guess it is easier to be loyal than to be trusting, since loyalty is a personal endeavour, while to trust requires we depend on someone else.
A very difficult thing.

still,

J

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

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