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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
SEASHORE A nasty sea thrashes ashore without regard She fragments the seascape, keeps up her guard Like a mad sailor chewing tobacco She spews out her juice to and fro The sand protests and groans-- Hope upon hope for a power of its own To be able to create; to determine its final fate... Granules do hang out with their own: One grain shifts with the next But the body, though quite heavy, is so easily vexed It can be instantly torn apart-- Like a man with a broken heart Just a trickle through the levee (a few infant drops of saltwater) Can rupture numerous veins without bother (The storm calms, a hot sun dries The sand dunes now grounded-- Yet, still one can hear their cries) Now, in the same hour a nor’-east blows-- Sand colonies scatter to all pointless places (kings and princes fall to their faces) There they gather like lost little children In the wilderness of forever; destitute, forgotten To battle each other as well as their foes For they no longer will heed the angry sea's bellows. ©2004 Grover Gall |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Grover, this is an excellent poem. I really enjoyed reading it.  Hugs  Ethel |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big angel hugs) Oh Grover, this is so very heartfelt, dearest friend, why do sand castles have to collapse, why do rocks have to erode as the water crashes against them, and why must one force have to dominate the other? (sad sigh) God Bless You, dearest friend, this is powerful, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Grover, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
A nasty sea thrashes ashore without regard She fragments the seascape, keeps up her guard Like a mad sailor chewing tobacco She spews out her juice to and fro The sand protests and groans-- Hope upon hope for a power of its own To be able to create; to determine its final fate... Incredible imagery in this metaphor! Sadie |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
Fantastic descriptions in the comparing emotion and the ocean Hope |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Wow, Grover! This was an excellent piece of writing with marvellous imagery. Take care......Sue I am in motion |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Grover~ stunning words, and incredible imagery! ~~**~~ |
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Youngatheart Member
since 2003-12-30
Posts 333 |
Whoa Grover!! My mouth is dropped open with amazement. This is excellent. What a fantastic piece of imagery...such depth to it. |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Man... I'm gonna have to start paying more attention to the waves, next time I'm at the beach...  Grover, I like your style You're one fine writer!  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
A nasty sea thrashes ashore without regard She fragments the seascape, keeps up her guard Like a mad sailor chewing tobacco She spews out her juice to and fro The sand protests and groans-- Hope upon hope for a power of its own an interesting image here..and one that sets the tone and mood for what follows.. enjoyed this Grover.. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
as I read this it sstory, it took me right to a front row seat of a captivating moive, wow, tremendously composed. Very much enjoyed... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent write Grover...much enjoyed! Hugs~ ~ Whatever our souls are made of, |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed this  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow! vivid imagery! great piece! well done! |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Oh, very ncice, Grover! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Grover "Just a trickle through the levee (a few infant drops of saltwater) Can rupture numerous veins without bother" I really enjoyed seeing with your words. Well done! |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Powerful mix of surf images, sensations, sounds, emotions....~P |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Thanks everyone for your words of encouragement! Grover. |
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Bonnie j Senior Member
since 2003-06-27
Posts 1588Ohio |
I close my eyes and see the picture you have painted on these pages of blue. Thank you for sharing. Love Bon-Bon  |
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Ravenwolfvoyager Member
since 2003-12-25
Posts 326 |
I'm sorry that I had missed your writing before. You truly decree much talent and vision within your work. It is truly an honor to read them. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
Now, in the same hour a nor’-east blows-- Sand colonies scatter to all pointless places (kings and princes fall to their faces) There they gather like lost little children cant help but think of judy collins song Sad deserted shore, Your fickle friends are leaving, Ah, but then you know it's time for them to go, But I will still be here, I have no thought of leaving. I do not count the time Who knows where the time goes? Who knows where the time goes? |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I love the imagery in this. It really made me SEE your poem. (You also have a very nice website Grover!)  |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
i too really enjoyed this one of yours, i am taking my time and ready a few a day and replying before i place another one. there all so good i am almost afraid to put any more of mine on marsha |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Excellent imagery! Excellent poem! *S* I really enjoyed this. *S* |
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