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Ravenwolfvoyager
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0 posted 2004-02-19 07:52 PM


Steps taken with a heavy heart weighing down my ascendance
Dripping rain ever lastingly to the cadence of my tears penance
A Nightingale sings vacant riddles within my hearts scripture
By the melodic echo’s of words hearkened in yesterday’s literature

It is without flight that these wings laid burrow within the cavity
For love bringeth a fruit that lay waste upon its plate of gravity
It is the hearkening voice within that lay foundations to rubble
And my inner eye that does not heed to the transposing trouble

Harkened to the tinkering douse of majestic psalm
Lay vacant into my troubled heart that feels wrong
Extinguish the key of the piano chords ascending light
In a farewell prelude to my hearts bidding flight

Transparent and transposing in the cold evening fall air
Carryeth a voice that leadeth only to my fallen despair
A creeping Dutchman vine lay way to my hearts path
That bringeth me to the dew leaves and the charnel’s wrath

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Suetang
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1 posted 2004-02-19 08:49 PM


Hello Jeff

Absolutely stunning......as always.  It's so nice to have you back where you belong.

Take care.......Sue

I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

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2 posted 2004-02-19 08:57 PM




(big angel hugs) Oh, dearest friend, this is beautiful but sounds hauntingly sad, sweet friend, I hope that instead festoons of roses and daffodils are decorating your hearts garden and the vines don't strangle but just furnish the walls, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

Sunshine
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3 posted 2004-02-19 09:04 PM


It is without flight that these wings laid burrow within the cavity
For love bringeth a fruit that lay waste upon its plate of gravity
It is the hearkening voice within that lay foundations to rubble
And my inner eye that does not heed to the transposing trouble

~*~

You are NOT old enough to know how I read this.  Suffice to say...you will ever be a romantic, if you see beyond, now.

Thank you.

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4 posted 2004-02-19 09:06 PM


its nice to see you again...
the words feel very sad today...but beautiful...

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5 posted 2004-02-19 09:10 PM


Harkened to the tinkering douse of majestic psalm
Lay vacant into my troubled heart that feels wrong
Extinguish the key of the piano chords ascending light
In a farewell prelude to my hearts bidding flight


Jeff, this one really touched my heart.
It's really good to see you. Hope all is
well with you, my friend.
Hugs  
Ethel

iliana
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6 posted 2004-02-19 09:25 PM


Ahhhh...Jeff, this was an outstanding piece of music.  Very deep and expressive just like music written in a minor key.  Good to see you here again, my friend!  
Grover
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7 posted 2004-02-19 10:33 PM


Great work... enjoyed it very much! Grover.
Seymour Tabin
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8 posted 2004-02-19 10:59 PM


Ravenwolfvoyager
If ever words could touch the soul
Then these have found the mold. Enjoyed

inkedgoddess
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9 posted 2004-02-19 11:12 PM


very elegant and classic in a romantic  /
but sad tone

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10 posted 2004-02-20 12:05 PM


so very good to read your art again....

~~**~~
There are moments when speech
is but a mouth pressed lightly and
humbly against the angel's hands.

Martie
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11 posted 2004-02-20 12:10 PM


RWV

As always you write with style...and touch on a feeling that comes from before and is still beautiful.

ThisDiamond
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12 posted 2004-02-20 03:54 PM


A wash of sadness flows the silken streams...until the rain.
TD

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