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0 posted 2004-02-17 02:43 AM


I'm having trouble liking this one cause I sound like I'm whining to me, but I was really just ranting because my mother frusterates me sooooo much! So excuse the *not so goodness* of this poem but I need to get it out before I burst.

Guilty letters
Guilty pleasures
Mommy what have you done?

Midnight hour
Love grown sour
I got another one

I got a letter yesterday
The second one this week
You call me pumpkin and princess
And speak of how you miss me

I was your sweet little girl
Your never-ending flare
Oh how I was deceived
Into thinking that you cared

You used to call me on the phone
And say “pumpkin I love you”
And I was mommies little girl
As I blushed and whispered “I love you too”

You called because you’d had a drink and then slept with another man
You called for just one reason and yes I believe its true
You never meant a thing you said
I was just a guilt reliever to you

But when I was little I was fooled
For I honestly thought you cared
But I found the truth one cold rainy night
When in drink your soul was bared

So we grew apart you and I
And things were never the same
You moved far away
So you wouldn’t have to hang your head in shame

And we never spoke again
Accept infrequently on the phone
Then the letters started coming
Telling of how you missed me so

I got so I didn’t care
I would read them and then move on
But its been six months and now two in one week
Mommy what have you done?

It must have been something dreadful
If you had to write me two
But really I’m not mad
I mostly pity you

I pity what you have become
A dead body with a brain
And although I love you dearly
I can’t ease your conscience again

Still I wonder what it is
As I sit down to read
And I sigh, coldly numb
As I listen to your pleas

Guilty letters
Guilty pleasures
Mommy what have you done?

Midnight hour
Love gone sour
…I got another one

Because of you I laugh a little harder, smile a little more, and cry a little less
~Bella~

© Copyright 2004 Bella - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2004-02-17 02:47 AM


oh Bella

get it all out, no one minds a rant... especially as bittersweet and touching as this

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2 posted 2004-02-17 03:06 AM


lemme hug you!

that's why we're here...listening

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3 posted 2004-02-17 03:11 AM


I think the content is great on this. It may be that you wrote it out of  pique but I would guess it more to be rancor... hard feelings are hard to tell. But really good content and if I may... I think you could do this one better, sounds like you been around the block a couple of times so I say spill it with some words.... but don't cuss, Ron doesn't get into that.

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4 posted 2004-02-17 03:22 AM


I see you going through alot of emotions, angry, sad, pity,...you are relasing those feelings through poetry and I have been there...poetry is therapy.

My heart goes out to you....

~ARH
love and hugs

Open your eyes, open your mind, open your heart, let me come in and show you love.....~ARH

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5 posted 2004-02-17 09:23 AM


Bella~
The pain cries to get out ... continue to let it~

Poignant emote~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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6 posted 2004-02-17 12:54 PM


Thank you all very much. Your caring is truely touching.
~Live and Laugh~

Because of you I laugh a little harder, smile a little more, and cry a little less
~Bella~

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7 posted 2004-02-18 06:04 PM


heart hugsssss this is so packed with emotion....nicely stated!

~~**~~
There are moments when speech
is but a mouth pressed lightly and
humbly against the angel's hands.

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8 posted 2004-02-18 06:43 PM


Nice flow of emotions...James
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9 posted 2004-02-18 09:44 PM


I do not know how to begin to reply...there is such bittersweetness, such disappointment, such exquisite passion in this write that it is obvious it comes from the heart...if the secret to successful writing is passion, you have raised the bar..
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10 posted 2004-02-19 12:03 PM


Bella, I fully understand the emotions you
apparently had about writing this one. Though
the things I need to write about aren't the same,
I do have some problems that I need to write about.
I think that writing these things would help to release
the pain inside of us. So, just keep trying to write
them out. You did very well with this one, sweet lady.
Hugs  
Ethel

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11 posted 2004-02-21 05:23 PM


Bela -- writing is a great release -- and although the tone of this was dark and resentful, it was a good poem.
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