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Jessie Carstein
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since 2004-01-08
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0 posted 2004-02-16 06:02 PM


I walk the thin line,
Across the black pit,
The fallen world above,
Shoves me unto it.

I drift through the darkness,
The tunnelling despair,
Feeling light headed,
Lighter than winter air.

So I fall forever down,
Onto blackened days,
Forgetting who I am,
I embrace the new ways.

My mind breaks in half,
Shatters like a mirror,
Insanity plays its card,
Madness begins to glimmer.

I lie on the padded couch,
My mind continues its fall,
I spout the random phrases,
That rise from me, a maddened call

I am bound in chains of white,
And confined in a soft cell,
Left to enjoy my sweet madness,
Here in this broken hell.

I am a lost and crazy man,
My mind gone for many years,
But worry not outside world,
In here there are no tears…


© Copyright 2004 Jessie Carstein - All Rights Reserved
iliana
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1 posted 2004-02-16 06:04 PM


Welcome to Passions, Jessie.  Good writing!
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2 posted 2004-02-16 06:07 PM


Jessie~

'I am a lost and crazy man,
My mind gone for many years,
But worry not outside world,
In here there are no tears…'


Excellent portrayal of the trip of no return~

Someone told me once that, "Crazy just might be a nice place to be."
They may be very right~


Great write~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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Member Rara Avis
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In Your Poetic Mind
3 posted 2004-02-16 06:22 PM


amazing!

~~**~~
There are moments when speech
is but a mouth pressed lightly and
humbly against the angel's hands.

Grover
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since 2004-01-27
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4 posted 2004-02-16 06:23 PM


Quite the poem... very good work! Grover.
Enchantress
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Canada eh.
5 posted 2004-02-16 06:25 PM


Excellent write..very much enjoyed.
Hugs~

  ~ Whatever our souls are made of,
      his and mine are the same. ~      
            

Jessie Carstein
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since 2004-01-08
Posts 41

6 posted 2004-02-16 07:08 PM


Thank you all for reading, I confess it has been a while since I posted anything but thank you all.
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