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HopeS
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0 posted 2004-02-16 09:40 AM



Body Language Reads Love

In those dreams of longing
I'm given passionate wings
Reaching the moonlit tide
Met where my lover sings

Ocean glistens in starlight
Neath moonlight reflection
He knelt down beside me
Placed kisses of affection

Rolling waves lap the sand
Hearts beating in harmony
Lovers in rhythmic unison
Being at one with the sea

Eyes knew from the glance
As the moon shines above
Our lips trace the desires
Body language reads love


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Margherita
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1 posted 2004-02-16 09:42 AM


Wow, wow, dear Hope, this is wonderfully sensual and romantic.
Bravo!
Love, Margherita

HopeS
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2 posted 2004-02-16 10:11 AM


Thank you Margherita , so pleased you enjoyed ... I did change the last verse to...

Eyes knew from the glance
As the moon shines above
Our lips trace over desires
Body language spoke love

Hope

Margherita
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3 posted 2004-02-16 10:25 AM


Yes, this little change makes it even more fluid and eloquent. "Body language spoke love" ... yes perfect.
Hugs. Margherita

HopeS
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4 posted 2004-02-16 10:45 AM


Thanks again  Margherita for you feedback , it helps in many ways
Hope

Richy
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5 posted 2004-02-16 06:06 PM





Now this is the kind of poetry,
I'm glad to see you write Hope!

It's more becoming, your
warm hearted nature


I hope your happiness, is lasting,
and blissful






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