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Bouquet Swirl |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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~*~ Twilight at dusk lasted longer today the floor boards made for a cool evening as I walked through the door. I knew you wouldn't be here and I wasn't supposed to miss you so I kept myself busy. Flipping switches lighting candles to fill the emptiness pouring wine into a crystal glass. Letting the bouquet swirl and hold me over Carly was singing "Anticipation" and chasing after some finer day. Consuming my thoughts in contemplation filled with regret and happenstance slow dancing across my mind. Spilling forth in celebration warm and breezy as the sun went down ever grateful for second chances. Tangible in dreams or not isn't easy to convey nor is this feeling I can't explain. ~*~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
BluesSerenade I like this very much. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Well thank you Sy, I'm so happy you stopped by to read. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lori "Tangible in dreams or not isn't easy to convey nor is this feeling I can't explain." Your poem speaks your feelings very well.  |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
Tangible in dreams or not isn't easy to convey nor is this feeling I can't explain. o you do always express so well my dear even if u think youre not it rings |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Blues, Loved your poem; each stanza layered image to build the following--nice and tightly woven, but with such a freeness in flow. Nice job, Blues! ~Sadelite~ |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
“Tangible in dreams or not isn't easy to convey nor is this feeling I can't explain.” You too Blusey? That’s the story of my life Well, I’m glad I’m not the only one  Anticipation huh? Great song! “These are the good old days” Thanks Bluesy |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Hugs Martie girl, and thank you~ Hello Michele, ma belle~ Thanks for ringing me. O you do know I appreciate it, doncha? Sadie~ What a nice compliment, I sure do thank you for that. Tightly woven and free flowing, if only I could do that every time. Thanks again~ Hey Richy~ I must confess, I questioned that verse, but I'm glad it worked, because I didn't feel like explaining it anyway~ Thank you thank you, one and all~ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oh gosh Bluesy, you do blues so well!  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I knew you wouldn't be here and I wasn't supposed to miss you so I kept myself busy. Flipping switches lighting candles to fill the emptiness pouring wine into a crystal glass. You conveyed them very well... so well I wonder if we weren't together this weekend? *S* Excellent write! *S* |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Bluesy, you set the scene so well! Enjoyed! |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
You "ain't" lost your touch, Bluesy Girl! I always enjoy your writing - thanks. |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Very much enjoyed this... a great write! (Haven't heard Ms. Simon in a long time!) Grover. |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"I knew you wouldn't be here and I wasn't supposed to miss you so I kept myself busy." You always trigger feelings. Thank you. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
I could see it played out in my mind Bluesy. Enjoyed this very much. Like the new pic - makes me anxious for summer. hugs, Chris"At one glance |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
sometimes feelings just need to be felt, and not explained....eventually they explain their-selves your heart is lovely... hugsss ~~**~~ |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent Bluesy..you have a way with words.. one I wish I had to convey such feeling. Hugs~ ~ Whatever our souls are made of, |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Flipping switches lighting candles to fill the emptiness pouring wine into a crystal glass. ========================== Letting the bouquet swirl and hold me over Carly was singing "Anticipation" and chasing after some finer day. ========================== Tangible in dreams or not isn't easy to convey nor is this feeling I can't explain. ========================== Beautifully written and showcasing quite well a heart. I much enjoyed reading this and understand it all too well in my own song of life's dance. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Consuming my thoughts in contemplation filled with regret and happenstance slow dancing across my mind. Spilling forth in celebration warm and breezy as the sun went down ever grateful for second chances. Tangible in dreams or not isn't easy to convey nor is this feeling I can't explain. I love this Lori. It's so pretty!!  Hugs Ethel |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Dixie~ Thanks, at least I'm doing something right! suthern~ So good to see you here, thank you for always encouraging me. iliana~ Thanks, interesting isn't it, how we conjur up a scene when all is quiet. Hi Helen~ That was sweet of you, thanks so much. Grover~ Thanks, the song is what got to my muse, who got to me. icebox~ Thank you for the nice compliment, I'm glad you felt the feeling. Chris~ What a nice reply, thank you very much and hugs back at you. Lauren~ You are so right, thank you for knowing. Hugs you~ Nancy~ I'm taking lessons from the best of them, including you. That was awful nice of you to say so, thanks. Mark~ How nice to see you here. I thank you for reading and for what you said, showcasing my heart? Ahem, I never could hide it very well. I've missed reading your poetry here, soon I hope? Ethel~ Your kind words are so dear to me, thank you sweets~ |
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