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DavePage
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0 posted 2004-02-15 07:40 AM


Most stuff I write is part of something else I want to do.

It is just a case of the day job paying the mortgage unfortunately it is IT which means the evenings are devoted to the day job as well.

The words like the Boy's and other words I published earlier are characters and come from something I will write
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I call you Hawk because you see me
No matter where I am
Where I look I see your eyes
You tell me to nod
To smile
To duck
To come home
A wild day beckons
I don’t need your eyes
I need you
Here

Faintly he heard:

Only I can translate your vision
Your life on my breath
As Custom dictates

From beyond the hill and across the darkness, the words written in silence:

I am the darkness
I seek my maiden fair
In tattered and torn velvet dress
To be engulfed in hair
To feel her body warm
For me she wear’s no veil
Just eyes that stare ahead
And a face below the pale

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Margherita
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1 posted 2004-02-15 09:21 AM


When we embrace the shadow, we see with more clarity.
You made me see the Hawk's eyes and feel the atmosphere of darkness.
You explore beautifully.
Love, Margherita

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2 posted 2004-02-15 09:22 AM


Dave~

'From beyond the hill and across the darkness, the words written in silence:

I am the darkness
I seek my maiden fair
In tattered and torn velvet dress
To be engulfed in hair
To feel her body warm
For me she wear’s no veil
Just eyes that stare ahead
And a face below the pale'


Oh my ... I am caught up in these words~

Wherever it goes ... I want to be~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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3 posted 2004-02-15 09:24 AM


Dave, this piece begs for 'more'...please?!
Wonderfully penned.
Hugs~

  ~ Whatever our souls are made of,
      his and mine are the same. ~      
            

ThisDiamond
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4 posted 2004-02-15 09:59 AM


Oh...an excellent write Dave!
TD

Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 2004-02-15 10:41 AM


DavePage
Good write, enjoyed the read.

Grover
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6 posted 2004-02-15 11:56 AM


A good write, very nice images! Grover.
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7 posted 2004-02-16 04:22 AM


continue on and share, I enjoy you
DavePage
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8 posted 2004-02-16 07:44 PM


Hawk arose like I suppose most words do, out of nothing and better confined to the same, and I wrote an idea from that
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I will walk with you
If I can reach you
I can not see you
But can I reach you
They wait on my left
Green beneath

Yes I will reach you
But why can I not see you
I will sing to you
But no sweet love
Can I see tonight

Around my heart I bear your hair
For my courage
To seek you there
And you my spouse
Take my ring
I take yours
Go fly you say
That is your choice

Why should I leave
Fool to seek death's embrace
I didn’t call you here
To waste your life
Take my hand
As I take your ring
Now as Hawks
We will sing

DavePage
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9 posted 2004-02-16 07:53 PM


I've reposted Hawk which is a sort of start but it goes back before that.

Maybe with the nagging I will start to write some words to being the words.

Dave

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