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Open Poetry #31

To the Cashier at a Starbucks on South Beach

Adonis Cross
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since 2003-04-07

Posts 46
Miami, FL, USA

0 posted 2004-02-13 05:30 PM

Monotony is king on Lincoln Road--
There's endless carbon copies on parade,
With catwalk struts and stuck-up looks displayed--
Enough to make this poet's head explode.
I've searched here for a subject of an ode
And every place I've sought it, I'm afraid,
Was proof that madness came to visit, stayed,
And multiplied wherever neon glowed.

I'm told this hasn't always been the case--
That simple beauty, paired with common sense,
Unfurled its way across these streets and thrived
'Til foolishness and "fashion" took their place.
With just a smile, you've given evidence
A relic of that era has survived.

[This message has been edited by Adonis Cross (02-14-2004 09:39 AM).]

Copperbell
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since 2003-11-08

Posts 956

1 posted 2004-02-13 05:41 PM

I like this...Those people who dare to be different by being themselves minus all the stuff covering them up...even if its just the attitude...them's my favorite.

Sadelite
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since 2003-10-11

Posts 2519

2 posted 2004-02-13 08:01 PM

This is marvelous--I hope more people become familiar with it.  What you say here is very true about many places, but oh, those smiles,
when they come can erase the madness.
   Looking forward to reading more of your posts.
               SAdie

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

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Listening to every heart

3 posted 2004-02-13 08:30 PM

Excellent! So much to this, Adonis! Thank you!

RSWells
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since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

4 posted 2004-02-13 08:42 PM

Really enjoyed your very modern sonnet and its tribute to unpretentious beauty.

iliana
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since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

5 posted 2004-02-14 12:05 PM

Welcome to Passions and Happy Valentine's Day! Quite a stroll you took me on. I could visual it -- that's a good write!

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

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California

6 posted 2004-02-14 12:08 PM

Adonis

Very well done and much enjoyed!

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

7 posted 2004-02-14 12:10 PM

I enjoyed your sonnet, Adonis. You have a typo, it should be 'unfurled'. I hope you can fix it. This is an excellent poem, all the way through.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

muted

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since 2004-01-15

Posts 2949
Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

8 posted 2004-02-14 12:12 PM

fantastic

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