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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2004-02-13 01:18 AM


"love"

she called

she said "come here"

we hooked our pinkies

injun style

we walked into the center square

we saw a blanket blooming miles

gather down to avenue

dots of white

and specks of blue

"love"

in stitch of fortitude

impressionistic smile

she knew

"this one is the one"

she drew

a quick fish in the sand...



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passing shadows
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1 posted 2004-02-13 03:49 AM


and thank you for sharing her
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2 posted 2004-02-13 07:55 AM


i love the last line , it makes the whole thing sparkle back to the title
: ) and cool name blaze  ,
   wolfy

inkedgoddess
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3 posted 2004-02-13 08:04 AM


wise lady you are
how you sneak that bit of wisdom in on us


Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 2004-02-13 08:48 AM


serenity  
Some fish make their home in the sand.

Sunshine
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5 posted 2004-02-13 08:50 AM



Drawing here...
What visuals!
What sight.

Enchantress
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Canada eh.
6 posted 2004-02-13 09:20 AM


Excellent!!  Love this keeper Ser!
~Hugs to you lady~

  ~ Whatever our souls are made of,
      his and mine are the same. ~      
            

ice
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7 posted 2004-02-13 09:25 AM


Not an unneeded word in the whole poem, awesome write, serenity...form and content
enjoyed
________ice
  ><>

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8 posted 2004-02-13 09:50 AM


This is just so cool.    hugs, Chris
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