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She Is
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She Is |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven 
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She’s the nearly imperceptible breath in a whispered confession- the first light of each new day the ache that grows with evening shadows and the hope that follows them to sleep She’s the fleeting sweetness of a snowflake kiss-the joy found in the chasing the intimacy of walking alone in summer rain- the restoration gathered along the way She’s a song never written a poem still waiting to be understood the colour love gives spring to summon brightness from winter’s gray- the scent of life rising from the earth She’s the sound of a train in the distance softly saying goodbye-goodbye until it’s just the moon and I- She is gone and we are waiting for dreams to fill the measure of the night [This message has been edited by Jamie (02-13-2004 12:20 AM).] |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Jamie -- this was exquisite! Puttin' it in the vault! |
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dingusjr Member
since 2003-09-24
Posts 415Missouri |
Yes, Jamie....VERY nice! |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
wow, so soft, lulling, beautiful! |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
This is just too beautiful  thanks for sharing Horses are my life |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Very lovely, should be put in a mans manual on how to love a woman! ~ARH  love and hugs Open your eyes, open your mind, open your heart, let me come in and show you love.....~ARH |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Jamsey, really I wish you'd write more often or post more often m'friend, I miss reading you. I have a lil suggestion though, hope you don't mind. I've read a few times.. once as it is, the second time without "she is" in the first 3 stanzas. I feel it's too repetitious and takes away from the poem and it seemed to flow better without. But...that of course is just my opinion. Wondermous as always m'friend Mee Mee heh. Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Jaime this is just lovely and surely will take her breath away when she reads |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Jamie Wonderful images in this...fresh and full of heart. Good to see you posting! |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Thanks to each of you- Taking time to let someone know you were there is important and not always possible- I'm glad you took the time. Mmy- I have it 4 different ways- one of which is as you suggested, and is actually how I was going to post it. Thanks dear. There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Jamie Jamie Jamie.... nuff said eh?  K |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Extremely good work! Grover. |
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