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Brown Eyes
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Brown Eyes |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
The dread eyes are watching me go by, Round and red just waiting for the next cry, Be it hunger or welted skin they wait For another’s cruelty never abate Although out of tears the tormentor won’t sate I can’t but stand and watch the sad brown eye Hoping there is some help in the shadow As they look longing out the dirty window But there is no hoped for intervention No aid for a life lived so shallow That stirs into me deeply this emotion, But I stay shackled by convention. How much is that doggie in the window? I wish I could buy away your fate. Gloom |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Your words "FEEL"....very deeply....and I do love the ending lines...Nicely done. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Very touching Gloom. Chris "At one glance |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Glad I'm not in those shoes! it's good that my eyes are blue, not brown, or I would think this were directed my way! You write with such emotion here. I like what I see happening to the pen. Have a good evening. Sadie |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Great writing, Gloom. Really! Happy Valentine's Day to you! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you're good |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this got lost back here so I had to go get it |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
i remember this one, but dont know why i didnt comment! glad you brought it back, deserves more replies  |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
(Sorry, had not realized I posted) Good poem. |
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