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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA 
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Pirate Ah, you breached uncharted waters, transgressed my Port of Heart, stole me in the night sea mist, took me floating in the dark. Left me lying on the beach sun's salty heat to dry me blind. Now here am I, this empty shell. You took it all, but never mind. You should have forced me to the plank, off the edge to bounty's floor. Instead, you leave me only silence. . . tides of silence (so loud the roar). You should have buried me at sea wrapped in Truth's tranquility. At least my mind would have been free. Pirate, you're a mystery. Come back again. Ravish me. |
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dingusjr Member
since 2003-09-24
Posts 415Missouri |
Ah, shiver me timbers mate! Darn, now you have me talking like that and brushing parrot poop off me shoulder. EYE! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
dingusjr -- thanks for the post -- have fun with it!.....jo |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh I enjoyed this, nice flow and rhyme. Wish I could do that.  Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
wheres the rum?? this is sexy... (ok, ravish can have its pros and cons but, still think pirates are a sexy notion!) |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Dark Angel -- thanks so much. I do think your writing is wonderful! hugs....jo |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Muted -- why thank you for the sexy! Sorry, no rum..... .......hugs, jo |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
iliana Interesting in form and content.. Very "female" poem...I particularly like the ending.. enjoyed _______ice ><> |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Ice -- yes, it is very "female." Thanks very much for your comments. I always appreciate them.  ....jo |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
Ahhh yes drained and dry like driftwood upon the sand ..... yes those feelings I understand Hope |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
HopeS -- thanks for posting. I knew you would understand. hugs.......jo |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
Wow --- temperature just went up about five degrees in here! |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
iliana, I love your writing. Very good!!  Hugs  Ethel |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
James -- good -- then the poem was effective! Thanks. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Ethel -- what a compliment! Thank you dear heart! .....hugs, jo |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Very good poem... nice momentum. Ravish me-- I like that! Grover. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
That's about as passionate a poem as I believe I ever wrote and I'm glad it made an impression! Thanks for your post, Grover.  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow! very passionate! I love the theme! There are a few men that I could think about when I read this...but I won't  |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Dixie doll, thanks! Those Pirates -- they steal the heart! ........hugs....jo |
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Youngatheart Member
since 2003-12-30
Posts 333 |
Iliana, OUTSTANDING TERRIFIC SUPER MARVELOUS! What a perfect expression of how you feel. Ah, you breached uncharted waters, transgressed my Port of Heart, stole me in the night sea mist, took me floating in the dark. Left me lying on the beach sun's salty heat to dry me blind. Now here am I, this empty shell. You took it all, but never mind Been there!!!!!!!!!!! but don't we go back for more???? We sometimes have no pride when it comes to the pirates of the heart. Youngster |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
YoungatHeart -- Ain't that the truth!!! Thank you so much for posting! hugs......jo |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
This is a treasure for sure. Well done!! believe in what your heart feels... |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Scorpio -- kind sir, I thank you -- glad you liked it! It was a treasure to me, too. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Jo - And all those other male poets thought I was crazy for having this name. Heh - Eat yer hearts out, ye landlubbers! This lady knows a real pirate when she sees one! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Iliana, m'dear...did you have to whisper the name Pirate so loudly? Now you have LJA to contend with. Walk the timbers steadily, girl...  |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
LongJohn -- sorry, but the Pirate is not LongJohn, I confess. But I'm glad you posted and thank you. Run with it if you must. My sense of humor is healthy. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Sunshine, thanks for the post and the warning. The Pirate here was from my past as you must realize -- not LJ -- didn't even relate that he might grab on to this. oh, no |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big angel hugs) Yay! Oh Jo, this is soooooooo wonderfully spoken, sweet friend, true pirates follow their code and their word and surely he will come back and return the favor or desert you with honor, God Bless You, beyond the dry tortugas you go now, I love this, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jo, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Noah, you totally got the feel of this one -- yes, higher and dryer than ever in my life, this one. (That was a long time ago, Noah -- I'm not on the beach anymore, thank God.) |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
A savvy write, Jo. Perhaps a summoning of parlay would have brought about an accord? -MVS You CAN make a difference: |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Mark -- thanks for your post. Regarding the suggestion -- not in this case. All the same, memories of a lifetime I would not have missed. |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
mmhmm you certainly are a story teller... Something about that mystery here. I need to go find myself a pirate! Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
GG -- I hope everyone has known at least one pirate in their lifetime! Thanks for the post, sweets! |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
iliana, I can't believe I have not posted against this-I've read it several times and thought I had! I'm trying to think whether or not I've been on that pirate ship before-perhaps, but the pirates really weren't cruel there. Some even shared of their treasure. As ever, I love your writing. Take care. Sadie |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Jo, You have me swimming in the equatorial waters of your steamy tropics....Pungent and spicy.....and the view from the "crow's nest" well...~P |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I'm a pirate sometimes...stealing all the jewels...James |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
Well, what could I say that everyone else hasn't said for me in their replys? I agree with them all, excellent poem here.  I love this to pieces! Going in my library. W.W. |
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