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Rdz9
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0 posted 2004-02-09 12:27 PM


Out under the stars, underneath the moon,
Relaxing under pine trees, night come none to soon,
The two of us, alone there, together in the dark,
Alone but for the flames dance, begun by tiny spark.

The campfire flames twirl round,under the night sky,
spots of light swirl round, the dancing fireflies,
The fires flames dance and spin, circling round and round,
Shoulder to shoulder we sit and watch, making not a sound.

The dance pace quickens, the fire bright,
Red and blue, against black night,
The fire slows, energy spent,
Its energy, the dance has rent.

We sit and watch the embers glow, thinking of our, lives,
begun from similar spark of fire, held by loves ties,
the embers whisper softly as we prepare for sleep,
the pine boughs whisper softly, the sky is black and deep.

We lay out in our sleeping bags, still close to eachother,
My true friend, my best friend, who understands me like no other,
As our eyelids begin to close, to drop to sleep devine,
Our hands brush eachothers, and our fingers interwine.

One in a sea of millions has the power to change the world...

© Copyright 2004 Rob - All Rights Reserved
Endlessecho
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1 posted 2004-02-09 12:30 PM


This was so beautiful, it almost made me cry.  I enjoyed the read.  Thank you.
Rdz9
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2 posted 2004-02-09 12:33 PM


Thank you... I have been absent from Piptalk for a time, and its always nice to recieve such a compliment so soon from my return... Thank you again.

One in a sea of millions has the power to change the world...

passing shadows
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3 posted 2004-02-09 12:54 PM


makes me want to go camping soon (as soon as it warms up a few degrees)
ThisDiamond
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4 posted 2004-02-09 04:03 PM


Beautiful write.
TD

JamesMichael
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5 posted 2004-02-09 04:43 PM


Enjoyed...James
Margherita
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6 posted 2004-02-09 05:01 PM


Sweet and tender intimacy shared beautifully.
Love, Margherita

Grover
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7 posted 2004-02-09 05:27 PM


A beautiful poem in every way! Grover.
garysgirl
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8 posted 2004-02-09 06:20 PM


Rob, this is so beautiful. I
loved the whole poem.
Hugs  
Ethel

Rdz9
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9 posted 2004-02-10 12:01 PM


Once again, I thank you all. It's been awhile, and it's good to be back, enjoying reading all of your new writes as well.
-Rdz, Rob

One in a sea of millions has the power to change the world...

iliana
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10 posted 2004-02-11 03:36 PM


Rdz9 -- this was really lovely.  Enjoyed it very much.  

[This message has been edited by iliana (02-11-2004 08:59 PM).]

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