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A Walk In Waning Gibbous
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A Walk In Waning Gibbous |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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A Walk In Waning Gibbous Could I walk now, this inadequate moon gone flat as stale beer on one side, that irritating stage of not full not half? Walk now, when it’s still too bright to dodge cops over in Mile Square Park, too dim to make the street lights pointless and show me an owl or a city coyote bumming in the night on land he used to own? Could I walk now, knowing I’d be bored with it, isolated when I thought to be alone, seeing too well to think about night vision or fantasize a hunt? Walk now, knowing it would mean strolling like noon without noon décor, moon without moon décor, but seeing all too clear how the dog’s legs lunge just before he hits the end of the chain? I’ve missed the full by nights; could I walk now? I may as well, I’m already out there. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wondering if you're okay... |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Ok. I learned something about "Waning Gibbeous moon" and I also learned that the moon affects us always in our moods. Moody write, well rendered! Love, Margherita  |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Ed~ Exactly !! Me wub it when the moon causes inspire ... poets touched by the glowing phase that causes such poetic phrase~ I've been at Mile Square Park ... seems like an eternity ago~ Thanks for the memories~  *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Walk now, knowing it would mean strolling like noon without noon décor, moon without moon décor, but seeing all too clear how the dog’s legs lunge just before he hits the end of the chain? ~*~ Well done, Sir! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed....A forlorn feeling in this. Good paint of emotion by just showing us outside, you show us inside...you do that so well! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Could I walk now, this inadequate moon gone flat as stale beer on one side, that irritating stage of not full not half? Both image and mood grabbed immediately... even knowing the journey might prove unsettling and unsatisfying, I wanted to walk every step. *S* but seeing all too clear how the dog’s legs lunge just before he hits the end of the chain? I’ve missed the full by nights; could I walk now? You miss nothing, my friend... and you help us see with new eyes... This does leave a feel of melancholy... but it's written magnificently. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
RatL -- The nice thing about the moon, is that it never remains in one phase too long! Very nice writing -- enjoyed! [This message has been edited by iliana (02-11-2004 01:57 PM).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Walk now, knowing it would mean strolling like noon without noon décor, moon without moon décor, =============================== love the word play in this.. Could I walk now, this inadequate moon and that was the perfect hook and opening line... very cool poet sir. The work of language deserves our greatest care ... |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
RatL. Loved it. Especially grabbed me with "Could I walk now, this inadequate moon gone flat as stale beer on one side, that irritating stage of not full not half?" "Walk now, knowing it would mean strolling like noon without noon décor, moon without moon décor, but seeing all too clear how the dog’s legs lunge just before he hits the end of the chain?" Take care, Sadelite |
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