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inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio

0 posted 2004-02-08 08:34 AM



I never wanted
to claim you
chain you
confine you
or contain you

how could i

when your colors
ride gloriously
as the sparrow's
upon the morning's rise

just to know that
you are there for me

if only to conjure you
in those moments
when faith dangles
uncertain, as the
last leaves of auturmn
spinning on a sigh

and feel you close
if only thru your aura
on intuition's call

and maybe on occasion
when i grow wings
on pure imagination
to gently touch alongside you

as you welcome me
my freebird

to share your open sky

[This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (02-10-2004 06:42 AM).]

© Copyright 2004 inkedgoddess - All Rights Reserved
Margherita
Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
1 posted 2004-02-08 08:52 AM


... to share your open sky

No, we can't chain love!

Wonderfully written and wise .... but in truth do we need others to fly high? We should not, but then reality tells us .... well!

Love and hugs. Margherita

Youngatheart
Member
since 2003-12-30
Posts 333

2 posted 2004-02-08 09:16 AM



I love this part:
and maybe on occasion
when i grow wings on
pure imagaination


It IS hard not to cling to those we love.
Bravo! super poem.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
3 posted 2004-02-08 01:08 PM


oh my this is sad but so beautiful...so beautiful...as you
Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113
Canada eh.
4 posted 2004-02-08 01:20 PM


"when i grow wings
on pure imagination
to gently touch alongside you

as you welcome me
my freebird

to share your open sky"

Absolutely beautiful Michele..bittersweet write.
Very much enjoyed.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~ I like not only to be loved,
   but to be told I am loved ~
                
            

bklynboy
Senior Member
since 2002-12-15
Posts 660
florida
5 posted 2004-02-10 10:40 AM


A waste of time obsessing over what you cant have. Move on!
inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio
6 posted 2004-02-10 12:13 PM


thanks for reading
bboy

LiquidMidnight
Member
since 2003-09-24
Posts 50

7 posted 2004-02-11 04:00 AM


You stole my idea; I was going to title a poem "Torch Song". :P

to claim you
chain you

I love this rhyme.

I also love how you took a cliche them (a bird) and put it in a noncliche context.

Richy
Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050

8 posted 2004-02-11 04:27 AM




That was really sweet Inkedgoddess

He must be quite a guy

Very lovely!




As far as for you bklynboy,

I think that your comment was rude, and totally
uncalled for. That is not how you treat a lady,
or anyone for that matter. And I think you owe
Inkedgoddess a sincere apology, at the very least.

iliana
Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434
USA
9 posted 2004-02-11 01:04 PM


Inked -- took my breath away!
inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio
10 posted 2004-02-11 05:41 PM


thank you richy, i am moved by your chivalry, bboy and i have discussed this, thanks
bklynboy
Senior Member
since 2002-12-15
Posts 660
florida
11 posted 2004-02-11 08:55 PM


richy....
your reply was inappropriate. I have nothing but been supportive of the works of the inked one. She knows when I dont like something she has done,cause I will tell. When she writes something I like, I tell her as well. If you dont like my replies,,,,tough! You can kiss my......well you get the idea or maybe you dont....I really dont give a rats bottom

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549
By the Seaside
12 posted 2004-02-14 02:48 AM


and maybe on occasion
when i grow wings
on pure imagination
to gently touch alongside you

I do so love your free spirit girlielocks~
You know I do!!  
Happy Hearts Day, yada, yada, yada~

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio
13 posted 2004-02-14 07:31 AM


and a hearty one to u 2 girliegirl
Bill Charles
Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now
14 posted 2004-02-14 08:00 AM


Michele - yes, you say it well...
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