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Alicethruglass
Member

since 2001-06-19

Posts 368

0 posted 2004-02-08 07:24 AM

You take me to a place
where pain is forgiven,
where answers need no questions
and the spinning is calmed.

But it is my reflection I see
each morning upon waking
that worries the real in me
and destroys the dreams
that prey on me along the way.

I watch the lonely take its steps,
wandering through the past
collecting worth, killing the antonyms
of the lost, the windsongs of charge
leaving behind only the breath of need.

Aspirations need fueling,
but the cost rises daily,
and I am becoming penniless
to truth and its hold on me.

The mirror is a thief,
a piece of glass that distorts the view,
darkening my eyes, betraying
what is on the other side.

There is no unconditional in life,
no laughter in frozen words,
no spring to the touch that paints my moods.
Only wishful thinking
and endless nights of devoted dreams,
a face in the shadows
binding me in belief.

I am aging, wearing it like a ragged robe,
becoming forgetful purposely,
dismissing myself into fruitlessness,
my usefulness ending as I
wipe the haze and my essence
from the mirror, once more.

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2004-02-08 08:12 AM

A powerful write reflecting your mood. May the dreams non remain confined to the night, let them out into the sunlight, so that they can manifest.
There is such melancholy in this piece. Touching.
Love, Margherita

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

2 posted 2004-02-08 09:37 AM

Alice~

You are a reflection of the many facets of the poetess ... wearing, caring, sharing~

THIS -

'windsongs of charge
leaving behind only the breath of need'

- is a *sigh*, waiting for a place to happen~
Know that it 'happened' here~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

noles1@totcon.com

MARK V SHELDON
Member Elite

since 2001-06-21

Posts 3015
In a corporeal internship...

3 posted 2004-02-08 10:35 AM

Very emotive and provoking write, my friend... This verse especially grabbed me:

Aspirations need fueling,
but the cost rises daily,
and I am becoming penniless
to truth and its hold on me.

In my own way, I can relate... more than I care to...

-MVS

You CAN make a difference:
http://educate-yourself.org/

Grover
Senior Member

since 2004-01-27

Posts 1967
London, ON, Canada

4 posted 2004-02-08 10:43 AM

Extremely poignant, well written poem! Grover.

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

5 posted 2004-02-08 11:01 AM

Alicethruglass
Mirror, mirror on the wall who's the fairest of them all? If it doesn't say you, then get another mirror. LOL Enjoyed

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

6 posted 2004-02-10 11:51 PM

Every stanza of this was incredible. Great writing! hugs, jo

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

7 posted 2004-02-11 01:46 AM

Enjoyed this look into the mirror,
and the way you wrote it down.

Nice writing ~A~

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

8 posted 2004-02-11 02:42 AM

the exact theme I have been focused on lately...nice write, I can relate

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