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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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o these wanderings I curse as I kiss a river's dredge muddied maps of veins in clay just beneath - a curve of toe clinging like a monkey's paw to the edge's feed of me trying to walk the inbetween creature of the air digs holes wrestling with mortality dropping scales growing wing sneaking to the backstreet bars an alley being quick proceed wary are the shadowings-- furtive is a gasp of air ancient is the lamp of light and timelessness defines despair ratherings I still had gills... knowing only that I stand. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
cool title. i'll be back. (and front, likely side [left, not right], but definitely back.) |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Then jump in the drink and come explore the abyss of what can be and what will be, yay! (big angel hugs) Time for ratherings to take place, God Bless You, I love this, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
I see your evolutionary ponderings go on...  Excellent write K. Thought I read a bit of "chemical desperation" in the raw feel of this, probably just me...lol. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Dunc? Buy an old soldier a drink? Noah...love and light shines on me every time you reply, sweet one. ty and C? (laughing) I only hope you kiss me first. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
You amaze me lady! What an awesome writer you are...so creative! Methinks we both have stories to tell.  Hugs ~ ~ I like not only to be loved, |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
serenity...Sometimes it's hard to grasp hold of the right words to comment on your poetry, but I want you to know that I think you're very special! |
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Masked Intruder
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Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
and sometimes I wonder if your internal rhyming is intentional, or if you're doing it unconsciously... but, either way... very nice. *grins* my grasp of your reality seems so tenuous. slightly amazed. -*-*- |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
 at Duncan, "chemical desperation!" or is it pondering of hops? Either way you think out loud kinda cool actually. I am a bit lost this time but no matter, as to me it certainly sounded like you were thinking about a drunk fish and that was a neat thing actually. yadayadayada |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
neat write K got me thinking some myself |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Serenity, "is the lamp of light and timelessness defines despair ratherings I still had gills... knowing only that I stand." I think that about says it. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
 gasp of air is right! this kinda tumbled out and down the page... but... and i hope you don't take this poorly... it reminds me of Don Knots. The Incredible Mr. Limpet comes to mind. I know it's not a "humorous" piece, but that's what i felt. *shrug* |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
*chuckle* C? I've been waiting for you...and yanno? I LOVE The Incredible Mr. Limpet! It is truly one of my favorite movies, and I have been compared to the fish character before (it has something to do with my apparent ability to BOOMERANG with my voice--I can scare the hell outta people sometimes) and some of these interpretations are so on the money for aspects of myself I hadn't intended to show--but I confess I actually wrote this in about two minutes, it was one of those meditative exercizes that I do-- based on this card of the major arcana: http://www.facade.com/tarot/description/?Deck=rider_waite&Card=15 And yes, it is about maintaining balance in the midst of personal change (or yes, Dunc, evolution) and the fish analogy was both apt to the process of evolution and allowed me a small giggle too, as I have been known to be able to "drink like a fish". *wince* Peace, good poets. I love this place again. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
ancient is the lamp of light and timelessness defines despair ratherings I still had gills... knowing only that I stand. Karen, yep, that's about all I know sometimes, too. LOL Hugs, sweet SereneOne,  Ethel |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
ancient is the lamp of light and timelessness defines despair ~*~ y'know, I think there's something in the numbers of your membership start... or maybe I just like your writing. Yea...that's it.  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
*shaking me head* you wrote this in 2 mins????? *scowling at me muse* lol The work of language deserves our greatest care ... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
yikes!  I wasn't bragging Jan, I was apologizing! sheesh, you! Get that muse in gear! |
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