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Snow
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desert flower looking for rain

0 posted 2004-02-07 03:47 PM



strong, till you

there's something about
the way i was pulled
inside out
turned and twisted
yes, even spine tingles
you know the kind
how they run up the back
over the arms
and dance across the heart
of the matter
you
have taken what was last of
the last
breath and i am sitting with
my hands braced for the fall
when you
speak and i will
because like the mighty oak
i was strong...
till you

©snow'03

"yet each man kills the thing he loves
by each let this be heard,
some do it with a bitter look,
some with a flattering word"
oscar wilde

© Copyright 2004 Snow - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2004-02-07 04:03 PM




(big angel hugs) This is powerful, sweet friend, a friend should always make the roots stronger and bud with flowers and not let the gale uproot the tree into the sky! (sad sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is powerful, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Snow, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

KoKo
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2 posted 2004-02-07 04:28 PM


Loved this. Absolutely loved it.
Grover
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3 posted 2004-02-07 05:37 PM


Profound. Warm, sensitive. Masterfully crafted poem! Kudos to you!!! Grover.
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4 posted 2004-02-07 07:24 PM


I really like how your words mingle together so perfectly. Fantastic!

[This message has been edited by Youngatheart (02-08-2004 08:52 AM).]

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just out of reach
5 posted 2004-02-07 08:49 PM


yes, even spine tingles
you know the kind
how they run up the back
over the arms
and dance across the heart
of the matter

Awesome write Snow !! hugs, Chris

"At one glance
I love you
With a thousand hearts."


— Mihri Hatun, Turkish poet



    

vandana
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6 posted 2004-02-07 08:51 PM


enjoyed
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7 posted 2004-02-07 09:44 PM




It’s amazing how much of our life force
someone can sap out of us...

I’m sorry you’re going through this
Snow.

You dig those roots down deep now
okay?

And if I see you start to teeter... I’ll
lend you some support until you get
stronger alright?

I mean that way I could do my part in
helping to preserve the woodlands,
you know...

But most importantly... because I care...


Enjoyed the poem!




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8 posted 2004-02-07 09:53 PM


Awesome write!  What talent you are!
Hugs~

~ I like not only to be loved,
   but to be told I am loved ~
                
            

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9 posted 2004-02-07 10:25 PM


bittersweet, beautiful, descriptive...excellent write
passing shadows
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10 posted 2004-02-08 05:03 AM


I know...yep
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11 posted 2004-02-09 10:45 AM


Mmm I know this feeling. Bittersweet dear friend. Great read though. Well done Snow. Glad to see your work being posted.

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

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