Misspelled Senryu?(a personal reflection)

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Open Poetry #31

Misspelled Senryu?(a personal reflection)

Sadelite
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since 2003-10-11

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0 posted 2004-02-06 04:40 PM

            Sad win paper's line
      supersedes the depth and thoughts
           of feelings unpinned.

[This message has been edited by Sadelite (02-06-2004 09:59 PM).]

Sadelite
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since 2003-10-11

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1 posted 2004-02-06 05:04 PM

whoops, to anybody who may have read this before, "Sorry, I forgot how to count!" Big whoops

Mistletoe Angel

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2 posted 2004-02-07 01:19 AM

(smiles) Yay! Awwwwwww, this is such a wonderful senryu effort, sweet friend, you spelt and did it just right, yay! (angel hugs) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is a most crystal clear reflection of the essential you, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sadelite, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

iliana
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since 2003-12-05

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USA

3 posted 2004-02-07 01:20 AM

C -- I liked!

Richy
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since 2003-05-03

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4 posted 2004-02-07 04:10 AM

Well, give or take whatever you were
supposed to put in, or take out?

I liked it!

Kinda reminded me of Carolina Panthers
last sunday...

Thanks Sadelite!

Sadelite
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since 2003-10-11

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5 posted 2004-02-07 07:27 AM

iliana,
    Glad you liked it-- I wish the words would have been true homophones, but they are commonly misspelled and pronounced by people around where I live anyway so I used them anyway.

Richy,

   My little puzzle poem may not have been clear.  If not, it's all in the I's.   It works without translating, but when I originally thought the poem up, it was with a different spelling and meaning.  Now I like the wrong spelling and meaning more because it supports the other one.
   Thank you for your helpful and positive comment.  I appreciate it.
                 Sadelite

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