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The Great Blue Wail
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The Great Blue Wail |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA 
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From the depth of the belly of the Great Blue Wail I call. I am drowning in this mammalian sea -- it’s bigger than you, deeper than me. Please throw me a lifesaver. Please throw me a line. They say love is blind and I can see no way to escape but thru your mouth’s confession. I struggle to stay afloat in the Great Blue mirror of itself, entrapped in the cavern of undeniability, encaged by the walls of inexplicability, adrift on acidic juices of sacrificed pride, awaiting my salvation. Love has colored the sky blue. It’s true. It colors me that way, too, as I await rescue by your words -- "I do love you." [This message has been edited by iliana (02-06-2004 03:00 PM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
liana Iwould sart swimming till you are rescued. LOL enjoyed. |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Love colored the sky blue. It’s true. It colors me, too, iliana, I like this...but I do hope you get rescued fast.  Hugs  Ethel |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Seymour, thanks for the sentiment!  |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Ethel -- thanks so kindly for posting. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Jo~ Oh ... I LOVE the word-play~ Neato penning dear poetess~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Thank you, sweet Marge! I'm glad you got the word play, I wasn't sure it was clear enough. |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Nice associations... imagery! Grover. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Grover, thanks -- appreciate your post! Have a happy day! |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
iliana, I, too, enjoyed the word play. Very clever metaphors... Very, very good! Sadelite |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
as I await rescue by your words -- "I do love you." I know that wait... and wail. *G* Enjoyed this very much! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Sadie -- thank you dear one. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Suthern -- I know that you do. Thanks for posting! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Words so important but not always sincere...James |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
James -- This is true. Thanks for posting. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Awwwwwwwww, the imagery in this is just breathtaking, sweet friend, I too always imagine when looking up at the clouds that I'm drowning in the heavens but it is a beautiful drownin like I can't stop crying in joy and laughing and giggling like a baby in a mommy's arms! (big angel hugs) Yay, this is gorgeous, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jo, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Thanks, Noah! angel hugs back to you! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
James, true, true, oh, so true. I want the real ones! Thanks for posting. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
So very original, dear Iliana, and captivating. Oh, those words contain magic, when said in full sincerity. Love, Margherita  |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Margherita, thanks a bunch. I hope so. |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
"it’s bigger than you, deeper than me." Thats why we don't understand why we await the words... enjoyed _______ice ><> |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Well written...and I do believe a life raft is floating your way right now.... |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Ice -- how well I know. Thanks for reading and for your post. Magnus -- thank you. I'm looking out for it. [This message has been edited by iliana (02-06-2004 09:40 PM).] |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I struggle to stay afloat in the Great Blue mirror of itself, entrapped in the cavern of undeniability, encaged by the walls of inexplicability, Liked that alot, iliana~ I'm sure glad my Mother taught me to swim at a young age~ |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
iliana Wonderfully written! |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
iliana - you write these words well, and may you escape from the blueness of it all... BC |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Marti -- You're so kind. Thanks! Bluesy & Bill -- It's taken me a lifetime, but I'm learning to swim! Thanks for the posts, both of you.  |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Wow! I LOVE this, In fact, I'm putting it in my library. Great word play, This should be a song, seriously. Oh, and... what a ..pleasant, spot that is, but ya know, it ends when you're vomited onto shore! Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows ...I am a girl of tears. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
GG -- you got that right! Glad you liked it and thanks for reading, sweet one. .....jo |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
"adrift on acidic juices of sacrificed pride" very cool line |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Steavenr -- glad you like it. Thanks. |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
“Please throw me a lifesaver.” I liked that! And a few tic tac’s if you got em...  I’d a maybe looked for a fire escape or sumpin. Preferably somewhere in the vicinity of the blow hole... Okay, I’m done, I’m sorry Seriously, I know the feeling well, of being in a place, that I can’t get out of... And, there’s absolutely nothing funny about it Great Job Iliana! That, was one whale of a tale... Oh Geeesh... Sorry... again  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this touched my heart |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Wonderful writing here Jo. Take care......Sue I am in motion |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Dixie -- sweet one, I thought it might. Thanks for reading. hugs.....jo |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Sue -- thank for the wonderful -- that's so nice of you to say. ....hugs, jo |
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carol Senior Member
since 2003-01-25
Posts 624Florida USA |
iliana,I would help but I can't swim great write thanks for sharing & your nice reply to mine  ...Rita |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Carol -- no need to help, don't risk it!! hehehe -- Thanks for your sweet post, as well! |
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