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"One of These Days"
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"One of These Days" |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
One of these days, I'll feel significance without wondering of why not or why, why can't a single warming tear pry its way from the corner of my eye. The moon will light a trail for tears to fall fanned by feathers, down nose they'll slowly crawl With slightest tickle, hint of curling rays, A hope that smile-cry eyes soon peeled glaze. One of these days, Significance will be of no question, and the we's I'll find redundant when that crinkling, tickling feeling Dehydrates into just-content. ~Sadelite~ [This message has been edited by Sadelite (02-05-2004 05:18 PM).] |
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Endlessecho Member
since 2003-09-05
Posts 398I live within myself |
Ah.. content. Won't that be wonderful. But that feeling while waiting. That quest creates some wonderful writing!  |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
The moon will light a trail for tears to fall, fanned by feathers down the nose in slow crawl; A slightest tickle, hint of curling rays, A hope that smile-cry eyes soon peeled glaze. Sadelite, this is very good writing!! I enjoyed reading.  Hugs  Ethel |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
endlessecho, Yes. You felt my write. Thanks for stopping by and responding. Usually, I'm a pretty happy-go-lucky person, but seem to be in a slump right now. This is a different type of writing for me... Thanks for stopping by and lending your comment. Take care, and I'll see you around your post soon. ~sadie ethel, You are a sweetheart! Thank you for your sweet comment. This type of writing is very difficult for me and I questioned how it came off. Thanks again. ~sadie |
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gadfly4you Junior Member
since 2004-01-24
Posts 37 |
I think you have found significance here......I enjoyed this much....:-) |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
I enjoyed your work! Grover. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Well, IMHO....you are off to a good start, I loved the play with words... |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big angel hugs) Oh Sadelite, tears should never go dehydrated and should always slide crystalline with hope and smiles, sweet friend, God Bless You, I send angel hugs your way, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sadelite, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Hey Sadelite...great piece. You really do have a great way of looking at things. Your poetry always lends it self well to my muse...when I am looking for new direction. Thanks my friend. Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Love the hope in this Sadelite. I’m with you... “one of these days” ... “I'll feel significance” Yep... one of these days... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you and me both ladybug... you and me both |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Missed this one earlier, too. Wow, this was really good. luv ya, jo |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
glad this came back up! |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
gadfly4you, And I feel you have significance at PIP. I miss reading your posts. Are you still posting, or am I just reading at the wrong times? Thank you for your thoughtful comment. Sadie Grover, And I always enjoy your work! Have a great day! Sadie Magnus, Thank you, Magnus. I'm pleased at how the words played in this, too. For once, they just came out without any thought. Thank you for dropping by... Sadie Noah, It is so good to see you again. Your comments are always so thought provoking. Thanks again, and happy writing to you. Sadie EV, Glad you think so... I always enjoy reading yours too, whether I'm able to post against it or not at the time. Keep writing. You have a lot to say. Sadie Richy, Your comment has me in shock. I would think you to feel much significance here, as we all think you're a wonderful person and have such fun and pretty expressions. Sadie Dixie, You, ladybug (loved the term), have more significance here than you'll ever know. We all love you so--you say so clearly what is felt in many hearts here. Thanks for your continued posting and responding. Have a great day! Sadie iliana, Thanks for posting against this and the positive comments. Your poetry is always so much appreciated by me, too. Sadie |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Sadelite - one of these days, yes, had these thoughts... BC |
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celestecat Junior Member
since 2004-02-02
Posts 29 |
really good.some great imagery. |
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