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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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Wrinkles remain Defiantly ignoring The optimistic claims Cosmetics make Life struggles Have eroded youth And carved memory canyons Deep enough to echo Rejuvenating creams Slip into sighs of old... old... old... Pastel powders in subtle shades Enhancements on tired eyes Are easily removed But the shadows within Grow darker without warning And tear ducts leak longings Last voiced long ago. Too much padding covers bones That creak and complain Providing perpetual discomfort And accurate weather forecasts This isn't the me I wanted to be And I turn from the face Not even a mother could love But you do. And reflections of mirror Whispers from the past Candles on birthday cakes And the worst of work days Become meaningless measures When your arms open for me And your heart beats want. Aging skin and aching joints Knotted veins and Spots that once were not Fade to unimportant Cells sing the joy of renewal As weary disappears and Wrinkles crinkle into smiles I taste your kiss And I am young again. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
suthern Love does make so many things new and beautiful and I'm very glad that it does! Wonderful poem! |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Aging skin and aching joints Knotted veins and Spots that once were not Fade to unimportant Cells sing the joy of renewal As weary disappears and Wrinkles crinkle into smiles I taste your kiss And I am young again. Oh, yes, suthern, I know this!! And, I love this part right here, too..... Too much padding covers bones That creak and complain Providing perpetual discomfort And accurate weather forecasts Isn't that the truth? LOL Hugs  Ethel |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
suthern Your ending makes up for it all. Wonderful write. |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
guess in my mind, the 3 of us will always be 'thriving' and we will never get old...just as long as we don't look in the mirror *smile* this is a wonderful contrast of emotions lady and it says wonderfully how important that feeling is "I want someone to grow old with" beautiful work my friend |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you tried those cremes too huh? wasted money...sigh great write suthern.....sharing the secret |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SweetSuthernGal~ Ah, ya' tickle me girlie girl~ YOU are a sweet drink from the fountain of youth~ AND THIS - 'tear ducts leak longings Last voiced long ago.' - turned me around in remember~  *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Let's see...(thumbing thru the yellow pages for Plastic Surgeons)...here's one!...Wrinkles Are Us.....yep, that should work....I see where Balladeer and LongJohn are trying to find someone to do breast enlargements?.....Some people are just really not happy with their general appearance...... Really good write gal....and a big thank you for making me look in the mirror..and another big thank you for making me realize how bad of shape I'm in.... |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
"Aging skin and aching joints Knotted veins and Spots that once were not Fade to unimportant Cells sing the joy of renewal As weary disappears and Wrinkles crinkle into smiles I taste your kiss And I am young again."  (smiles) Yay! Awwwwwwww, this is sooooooo gorgeous, sweet friend, this made me cry as I believe love can make someone feel young always and I dream so much to get to sip from its crystal waters, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Suthern, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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Kie Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 77USA |
Your poem was so very nice to read. You expressed your thoughts so well. Loved the ending. Kie |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
DOES HE HAVE A BROTHER?????   and all this time I been using Oil of Old Lady. *L* Love the theme and word play of this cute and clever inspire.. tis a sincere sleeve you wear your heart on with this gem. Well done Ruth-girlie  There is a pleasure in the pathless woods. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Martie: Even love can’t make this gal beautiful… but new is pretty wonderful… and feelings count as much as looks, right? *S* Thank you very much! *S* garysgirl: All too miserably true… LOL… My hip did NOT like the change in weather systems we got last night! LOL Thank you very much! *S* Seymour: It does indeed, my friend. *S* Thank you very much! *S* jellybeans: Well… you and Toe can thrive as you look in the mirror… I’ll just stand around and turn green and make nasty comments about… abundant hair? LOL Yes… when you want to grow old with someone, “old” isn’t an issue anymore. *S* Thank you! *S* PS: There’s a sucker born every minute… I just gave several of them some time off. LOL Thank you! *S* Marge: That’s Delaney’s Kool-Aid you’re sipping, gal! *G* But I like your confusion. *S* Thank you, dear lady… so very much! *S* Toerag: I’d have to win the lottery to be able to afford even a face fix! LOL And if you think YOU are in bad shape… why no wonder you run every time I’m anywhere near! LOL Thank you so, my friend. *S* M’toe: You are dear… and I hope your wait is rewarded with a love that will last a lifetime… you deserve no less. *S* Thank you! Kie: Thank you so very much… and welcome to Passions! *S* JM: ROFLMAO @ brother AND oil of old lady… you are too much! *S* Thank you so much… I’m glad you like! *S* |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Aha..."I taste your kiss and I am young again"...lovely...James |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
JamesMichael: Thank you so much... I'm glad you liked! *S* |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Real....or sensual? Sensual....or real? Both....as life is supposed to be. A this is a most excellent poem, Laura...I am stashing this one in the library! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Suthern -- this was A+++! |
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allamericanjoe Member
since 2003-10-02
Posts 116Iredell county, NC |
beautiful...vvv "The secret of life is enjoying the passage of time" ~James taylor~ |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Ratleader: You ask "Real....or sensual? Sensual....or real?" Perhaps slur the words together for surreal? *G* (Just as long as you don't think "sorry" fits! *S*) Thank you very much, my friend... iliana: I didn't even get those grades in high school! LOL Thank you so much! *S* allamericanjoe: Thank you very much! *S* |
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