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1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2004-02-04 07:59 AM



Liquid Lover

you have
held me
a thousand times
and I never
tire of
your sweet
embrace
my words
could never
do justice
to the beauty
of winter breath
floating above
your salty face
and how
the palm of
your gentle hand
fills up all
the empty spaces
of my skin
where I have
so carelessly
left so many
others out
to open up
and welcome
you in
and unlike
they
your waves
come rushing back
when I have
pushed you away


© Copyright 2004 Helen Chambers - All Rights Reserved
ice
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1 posted 2004-02-04 09:06 AM


Excellent.....especially the ending
enjoyed
_______ice
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bslicker
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2 posted 2004-02-04 09:28 AM



bernie

A smile a day keeps the world in smile's.
Bernie Slicker

Sunshine
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3 posted 2004-02-04 09:34 AM



Very smooth, helen...

Kie
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4 posted 2004-02-04 10:30 AM


A hint of mystery. Cleverly written. Very nice to read. Kie
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5 posted 2004-02-04 10:53 AM


Beautiful write... I particularly like the ending. *S*
steavenr
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6 posted 2004-02-04 01:39 PM


ahhh...beware the tides of love...excellent write, nice images
Grover
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7 posted 2004-02-04 01:52 PM


Flows very well, nice images. Grover.
iliana
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8 posted 2004-02-06 12:17 PM


Helen, this was really lovely and so very clevely written.  ......jo
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9 posted 2004-02-06 12:24 PM


Never ceasing to amaze me... you're brilliant.
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10 posted 2004-02-06 08:11 AM


flow of love...
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