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Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

0 posted 2004-02-03 06:39 PM

Meet Me in the Middle

This was where we once stood
in spring light and summer warm,
even on days of fall with leaves departing,

there, in the middle
of the high point, talking of mountains
we’ve climbed,
oceans dreamt over,
sunrises and sunsets of our pasts,
and those we hoped to share
down the road.

Promises were born here,
on the high.

We had never come to see this middle
deep in the heart
of winter,
but it is here, heightened in its truths
by the hand of nature, herself;

stark in its contrast of bridging gaps
no matter what may come,

and I was struck by the fact
that before me waited a moment,
there in the smooth white,

where angels should lay down,
imprinting their existence,
and where footsteps
might be seen,
leading me
to you.

Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen?

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (02-04-2004 10:15 PM).]

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

1 posted 2004-02-03 07:12 PM

love the idea of meeting in the middle of that bridge...lovely picture..is it near you?

hugs
M

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

2 posted 2004-02-03 07:28 PM

With my luck....I would reach the top,  slip
and slide all the way to the bottom,  hopefully...
on my butt!

Another very nice winter scene,  and yet
another beautifully written parcel of words
to accompany it...

Richy
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since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

3 posted 2004-02-03 07:34 PM

Yes, meeting in the middle,
is always the best way

This was excellent Karilea

I'm glad I got to read it
Thank You!

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

4 posted 2004-02-03 07:36 PM

"where angels should lay down,
imprinting their existence,
and where footsteps
might be seen,
leading me
to you."

Beautifully penned Karilea...
wonderful imagery....(wishing you would teach me)
Hugs~

~ I like not only to be loved,
   but to be told I am loved ~

scorpio
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since 2002-10-02

Posts 5178
right...there

5 posted 2004-02-03 07:40 PM

I love the images and emotions you created here Karilea. The last lines play well in my heart.

believe in what your heart feels...

Grover
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since 2004-01-27

Posts 1967
London, ON, Canada

6 posted 2004-02-03 07:59 PM

A beautiful picture, but the high quality poem could have made it as a "stand alone." Excellent work! Grover.

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

7 posted 2004-02-03 09:17 PM

there, in the middle
of the high point, talking of mountains
we’ve climbed,
oceans dreamed over,
sunrises and sunsets of our pasts,
and those we hoped to share
down the road.

Love your writing Karilea,
and the way you capture a dreamscape.

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

8 posted 2004-02-03 09:22 PM

Karilea, this is so beautiful.
Thank you.

Hugs

Ethel

Mistletoe Angel

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Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

9 posted 2004-02-03 09:28 PM

(smiles) Awwwwwwww, I love this, sweet friend, your words always seep magic and sunshine through the middle, yay, God Bless You, I love this, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karilea, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

kayjay
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since 2002-06-24

Posts 2015
Oregon

10 posted 2004-02-03 10:35 PM

Meet, I would you there on bridge to anywhere.
Seat, I would you there in places we might share

Beautiful pix and lovely words. KJ

SmartChick
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since 2001-09-23

Posts 7081
On A Journey To The Unknown

11 posted 2004-02-03 10:58 PM

Awwww Karilea, once again you have written a beautiful poem. I love the picture, too.

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

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displaced

12 posted 2004-02-04 04:03 AM

you should consider writing greeting cards

Laoha
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since 2003-03-07

Posts 161
Nevada, USA

13 posted 2004-02-04 04:24 AM

so beautiful!

Christopher

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since 1999-08-02

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Purgatorial Incarceration

14 posted 2004-02-04 03:48 PM

I thought Kansas WAS the middle!

last line was a smile, a warm, soft, genuine smile.

Duncan
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since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

15 posted 2004-02-04 06:33 PM

LMAO @ C

Love this line Kari...
"stark in its contrast of bridging gaps"

Thanks...you were right.

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

16 posted 2004-02-04 09:49 PM

Ahh this is beautiufl and so is the pic

I was wondering though, if...
you'd remove "of winter," the last line from.....
and I was struck by the fact
that before me waited a moment,
there in the smooth white
of winter,

To let it read like this.....

and I was struck by the fact
that before me waited a moment,
there in the smooth white

you've already mentioned "winter" in the poem.. so I think the readers already know it is winter, and "there in the smooth white" sums it up without you repeating yourself.

it is just my lil opinion though

sunshinygirl

Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder.
(by Virginia Woolf)

steavenr
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Posts 4058

17 posted 2004-02-04 10:07 PM

this is such an exquisite write...so rich in imagery and flowing in form

celestecat
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since 2004-02-02

Posts 29

18 posted 2004-02-04 10:13 PM

Very good. Its beautifully descriptive and sets a very magical scene.

inkedgoddess
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since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

19 posted 2004-02-04 11:24 PM

have to echo my friend, bluesy, it is a dreamscape bathed in winterwhite

Kaoru

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since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

20 posted 2004-02-05 03:17 AM

Beautiful, both the picture and the poem.

Rdz9
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since 2003-03-16

Posts 142
MT, USA

21 posted 2004-02-05 09:41 AM

Aye... Beautiful... in the middle. Enjoyed.

One in a sea of millions has the power to change the world...

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

22 posted 2004-02-05 05:58 PM

you just wrote a poetic snowglobe...
how lovely is that.

There is a pleasure in the pathless woods.
There is a rapture on the lonely shore.
I love not man the less ... but Nature more.

Lord Byron

vandana

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since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

23 posted 2004-02-05 07:02 PM

one of my favorite

liked it so much

)

NewEnglandlazurlu
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since 2002-01-04

Posts 7470
A Mountain Paradise

24 posted 2004-02-05 07:35 PM

Karilea, this is so beautiful and romantic that it made me cry.

and I was struck by the fact
that before me waited a moment,
there in the smooth white,

where angels should lay down,
imprinting their existence,
and where footsteps
might be seen,
leading me
to you.

Unbelievably beautiful words.
Huggles, Marti

I take no credit for my poems. Although I write them, I feel
more like I transcribe them. It's just a matter of listening.

Amara
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since 2003-02-23

Posts 158
East of the moon, west of the sun.

25 posted 2004-02-05 08:17 PM

Gorgeous, absolutely gorgeous. And free verse, too, which is my favourite kind. ^^

...talking of mountains
we’ve climbed,
oceans dreamt over,
sunrises and sunsets of our pasts...

I'd meet anyone in a place like that.

Light keep you always,
Amara

May light keep you, faith guide you, and love and laughter always find you.

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

26 posted 2004-02-06 03:51 PM

Stunningly beautiful... I had to go back and read again to regain the mood I lost when Magnus did his slippy slide... *G* But that was a joyful chore. *S*

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