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Christopher

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Purgatorial Incarceration

0 posted 2004-02-03 01:01 AM

Revealing Skies
©2004 C.G. Ward

saw a cloud in the sky this morning,
small, seemingly still.

looked like I could cover it with a thumb,
so I did.

it fit nicely,
this lonesome cloud,
beneath the confines of my desire,
but only a moment
before:
c h a n g i n g,
it floated toward a new shape.

I tried following it,
tried to keep it contained
in the image I first understood,
but it refused.

across the day it traveled,
morphing form after form after form.
no matter how long I waited,
somehow it never managed to find
it’s way back to the original design.

took some time to realize,
like you,
it didn’t want to.

Guardurthoughts
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since 2001-10-16

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1 posted 2004-02-03 01:40 AM

Your lines made me imagine putting my own thumb to the sky and waiting for it to change.
Trying to match it up agian but it never occuring...the end really shocked me because in my own life its the same way. Great write.

~~~Gaurdurthoughts~~~

"the best and most beautiful things cannot be seen,or even touched. they must be felt with the heart"

Mysteria

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British Columbia, Canada

2 posted 2004-02-03 01:57 AM

What a great comparison and I can't wait for daylight

muted

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Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

3 posted 2004-02-03 02:41 AM

this is very whimsical..hmm..i like it..
i can see you chasing that little cloud in my head like a child with a runaway kite!

nicely done...even though i didnt realize you did "whimsy"

but the message came across loud and clear

Michelle_loves_Mike

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since 2003-12-20

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Pennsylvania

4 posted 2004-02-03 03:19 AM

wow, i like this,,,,the visual and idea go well together,,and the message is clear
michelle

I wish all could find the true happiness I have found,,in the eyes of Mike

Mysteria

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British Columbia, Canada

5 posted 2004-02-03 12:48 PM

Sure! Do you realize how many clouds there are in B.C. (the rainy province?) been twiddling thumbs all morning to try to catch one. Seems they don't ever go back only forward like folks

passing shadows
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displaced

6 posted 2004-02-03 12:52 PM

gawd! how sad and true! love the metaphor!

iliana
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7 posted 2004-02-03 01:21 PM

Christopher -- great observation and understanding displayed in this. Enjoyed.

Christopher

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Purgatorial Incarceration

8 posted 2004-02-04 12:05 PM

thanks all... realizing that while passing through life - life passes through.

Duncan
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9 posted 2004-02-04 06:38 PM

"saw a cloud in the sky this morning,
small, seemingly still.

looked like I could cover it with a thumb,
so I did.

it fit nicely,
this lonesome cloud,
beneath the confines of my desire,
but only a moment
before:
c h a n g i n g,
it floated toward a new shape."

This one C, I both understand and envy.

Might end up being a favorite. Very cool image, thumb to the sky...chasing a cloud.

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

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10 posted 2004-02-04 06:43 PM

reminds me of that old song, "it's life's illusions I recall. I really don't know clouds at all..."

good write...thoroughly enjoyed

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

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11 posted 2004-02-04 10:01 PM

I enjoyed this very much Christopher

M

Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder.
(by Virginia Woolf)

Nightshade

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since 2001-08-31

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just out of reach

12 posted 2004-02-05 10:20 AM

Wow !! I have missed so many wonderful write while computerless(?).
This one is library bound Christopher!!
You amaze me. Chris

"At one glance
I love you
With a thousand hearts."

— Mihri Hatun, Turkish poet

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

13 posted 2004-02-05 10:23 AM

Wonderful!

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside

14 posted 2004-02-06 10:08 PM

I liked the slow speed of this,
not that I don't like wild rides or anything. Heh~

Thanks for all your thoughts to ponder.
Good stuff, Christopher~

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

15 posted 2004-02-06 10:12 PM

Beautiful Christopher,...very much enjoyed.
Hugs~

~ I like not only to be loved,
   but to be told I am loved ~

Greeneyes

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In Your Poetic Mind

16 posted 2004-02-06 11:13 PM

always changing...

I lie awake at night
I reach out to touch
Feel you by my side
I reach I never feel you
Will I ever get to feel you again
Just one more time

NewEnglandlazurlu
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A Mountain Paradise

17 posted 2004-02-06 11:18 PM

Christopher, it is not often I see a piece you have written. I am always fascinated by the brilliance of your writing.

If the sun comes out tomorrow, I shall be chasing a cloud with my thumb.

Hugs, Marti

I take no credit for my poems. Although I write them, I feel
more like I transcribe them. It's just a matter of listening.

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