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One Miss Away
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One Miss Away |
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thinktwice Member
since 2003-12-23
Posts 125United States |
One miss away from disaster More fine lines made in every way The bell tolls, ringing only faster Long hard thought brings bitter taste They’re one sheep short of a flock Left to myself as the day is leaving Eyes rolled back in a dreamy toss Back to experiences still erasing Forever believable in deceiving splendor Don’t let it cease for the fear and the falling All rolled up in moments growing fainter Waking out of silhouettes never changing |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
I like this thinktwice. When I need a title for a poem I usually pull it from the first line that is written. I would call this One Miss Away...but then that is just a suggestion. Well done. Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
that's depressing...but I love depressing  |
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thinktwice Member
since 2003-12-23
Posts 125United States |
lol...yeah it's a bit depressing... that's how it comes out sometimes...well...alot of the time for me. Adam |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Well done Adam. Good strong thoughts set into images that give the emotion depth. TD |
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Kie Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 77USA |
This has a mysterious quality and a dark hint to it. I really enjoyed it alot. |
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thinktwice Member
since 2003-12-23
Posts 125United States |
okay...the title that i've now given the poem is...."One Miss Away"... |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
A well-written mystery which I am adding to my library. |
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