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Foxyoasis
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since 2003-06-10
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Atlantic Beach,Fla

0 posted 2004-02-02 12:06 PM



The Beauty of it all
the soft rose the
gental touch

The thorns how they
prick my finger so
gental like the hand
the loves me is raised
against me once again

the irony of it all
when the tall tale
becomes not this
at all

the sweet lovely
looks of lust
in the eyes
decode the error
of your intentions
that come in so
dainty

the way the
spirt of your
soul sends its
pleasure to me

with its dark colored
eyes of deception the
teeth of sharp falls
of your faith

I look away once
only to
remeber all over
again

not edited yet as well

Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me.....


© Copyright 2004 Julie O'Neill - All Rights Reserved
Copperbell
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since 2003-11-08
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1 posted 2004-02-02 12:25 PM


so sad...
passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
2 posted 2004-02-02 04:44 AM


I understand totally
Michelle_loves_Mike
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since 2003-12-20
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3 posted 2004-02-02 06:21 AM


touching,,,,I'm looking forward to the edited version, I feel punctuation in the given places, will help in the emphasis of the right lines at the right time,
Michelle

I wish all could find the true happiness I have found,,in the eyes of Mike

Foxyoasis
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since 2003-06-10
Posts 974
Atlantic Beach,Fla
4 posted 2004-02-02 06:36 AM


Yup it always does I ususally post what i just written fresh and from the soul

Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me.....


Kie
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since 2004-02-01
Posts 77
USA
5 posted 2004-02-02 10:35 AM


Filled with emotion, reflection, and sincerity. Really touches the reader.
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