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EvocativeVerse2
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0 posted 2004-02-01 01:57 PM



I Wish I’d run The Night We Met

I gave to you a golden thing,
A token called a wedding ring,
And pledged a vow to love renewed,
Because I thought your heart I’d wooed.

How ill considered was my plan,
I could have been a ladies man,
Now all I own belongs to you,
To happiness I’ve said adieu.

My weekends are an irksome bore,
I know not laughter anymore,
You’ve changed the man that I once was,
All for the glory of, “Because!”

I use to ride upon my bike,
And fish rivers for bass and pike,
I feel naught in my heart these days,
Our conversation is but clichés.

I wish I’d run the night we met,
For then I’d know not this regret.

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

© Copyright 2004 Kevin R. Middleton - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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1 posted 2004-02-01 02:01 PM


Don't we give ourselves the hardest tests?  Lots of truth here...but hindsight...is always something we can learn from as we go into the future.
Grover
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2 posted 2004-02-01 02:06 PM


A sad poem. Very good write! Grover.
icebox
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3 posted 2004-02-01 02:13 PM


Late in his life, Henry II said, "I could have conquered all the world...if not for women."

Take it one day at a time.

Good luck!

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4 posted 2004-02-01 02:31 PM




(big angel hugs) This is so very heartfelt, sweet friend, matrimony truly is something that should be taken seriously and examined closely, as a vow is a vow, then again, who knows, some women like to have fun in those ways! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kevin, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton


"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

Enchantress
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5 posted 2004-02-01 04:01 PM


Bittersweet write Kevin..
But, oh so well done!
Hugs~

~ Is that love I see in your eyes...
  or merely a reflection of mine? ~

iliana
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6 posted 2004-02-01 04:03 PM


  Well done, good writing.
Sadelite
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7 posted 2004-02-01 04:08 PM


EV,
   Bitter-sweet... I wonder if what you write of isn't something that everyone feels if not but just a second.  You have captured it well in words, my friend.  Take care.
           ~Sadelite~

McLean
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8 posted 2004-02-01 04:13 PM


Who you once were, eh?  This speaks of such a sad experience.  Having gone through this type of ache before (similar, but very different, I'm sure), I wrote this long ago (thought you could relate):

The wedding ring you gave to me
So many moons ago
Is broken now, as is the vow
Leaves nothing left to follow

To mend the heart is so obscure
As is to fix a dream
But moving on and being strong~
Not easy as it seems

This substance you have left with me
Poisons my aching core
My hate for you is still brand new
Killing love that was before


Your poems beginning just reminded me of the birth of this one.  I hope you are not the one inspiring your work, and if you are...I wish you much peace during this time of excavation.

McLean

Martie
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9 posted 2004-02-01 08:24 PM


Kevin

It's a very difficult thing...to make a relationship work forever. You have written the heartbreak well.

passing shadows
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10 posted 2004-02-02 12:34 PM


sad stuff Kev, but better now than later ey?
Kie
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11 posted 2004-02-02 01:26 PM


Your poem has the perfect blend and flow. Very sad and it pulled at my heart strings. May you find happiness again.
froggy
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12 posted 2004-02-03 01:37 AM


Sad but written beautifully.

Hugs to you from me.



Michelle_loves_Mike
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13 posted 2004-02-03 03:11 AM


ouch
This is why I give my Mikey the freedom of card nights with the boys,,lol
Michelle

I wish all could find the true happiness I have found,,in the eyes of Mike

Tais
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14 posted 2004-02-03 02:36 PM


EvocativeVerse2, your words express a sadness within. Conversation is the best medicine for two people in a relationship.
It takes much tolerance and understanding from both, to be able to listen.
You poem tells us that you know how to express yourself in words, use that talent in the communication with your wife.
But she needs to be willing to listen.

I hope all is worked out fine for the both of you.

Your poem was very well expressed.


Tais

MARK V SHELDON
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15 posted 2004-02-03 04:55 PM


I'll take a different route and presume that this poem is through the voice of a persona rather than its author, in which case, I thought this was humorous in a dark and cynical way.  Although it's not remotely funny as a reality, as a "black humor" kind of write, it most certainly illicits a smirk.  

-MVS

You CAN make a difference:
http://educate-yourself.org/

EvocativeVerse2
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16 posted 2004-02-04 12:58 PM


Hey all thanks for reading this little rhyme...and Mark...you guessed correctly. This is just dark humor. All is well with my wife and I. We are very much still devoted to one another and always will be. This is just a poem from the author's demented mind.

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

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