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Steve Motuel
Member

since 2003-12-19

Posts 72
Bergen auf Ruegen, Germany

0 posted 2004-02-01 01:50 PM

My world is my own

The world is my prison and life is my crime
To live so alone till the end of all time
I long for the days where one we would be
I yearn for the times when my soul you did free

Life is no more than a game for the soul
And love is the prize the only true goal
The hopes and the dreams that only you give
The food for my soul the reason to live

My world is my own come and lay by my side
Our love is so pure so why should we hide
To share what we have in the way that we do
My world is my own but my love is for you

Never alone with a you by my side
No more need I suffer no more need I hide
I gave you a love that was meant for no other
A love that sets free and not meant to smother

So I dream of a time where my life had a meaning
Our feelings wrapped tight in a blanket unseeing
The butterflies fly in my tummy each day
I hope and I pray that forever they’ll stay

My world is my own come and lay by my side
Our love is so pure so why should we hide
To share what we have in the way that we do
My world is my own but my love is for you

© Steve Motuel 2004-02-01

Snow

Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 1170
desert flower looking for rain

1 posted 2004-02-01 02:01 PM

i have to admit i felt the emotion was well written, however, as soon as i opened the reply box and read what you have ... about the airlines and certain bags i started to smile and giggle.. and totally forgot what it was i wanted to say about the poem...
:-) thanks so much for sharing this.

snow

"...why does my skeleton pursue me
if my soul has fallen away?"
~p.neruda

Grover
Senior Member

since 2004-01-27

Posts 1967
London, ON, Canada

2 posted 2004-02-01 02:23 PM

Very nice! Grover.

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

3 posted 2004-02-01 02:27 PM

(smiles) Awwwwwwwww, I love this, sweet friend, this world is yous but is always open to share and give too, yay! (big angel hugs) May loves joy always blossom in your heart, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Steve, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

Suetang
Member Ascendant

since 2001-03-07

Posts 5187
Melbourne, Australia

4 posted 2004-02-02 07:53 PM

A fabulous piece of writing Steve that I enjoyed so very much. It deserves to be back on top.

"To love is to receive
a glimpse into heaven"

Take care.......Sue

I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

Kie
Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 77
USA

5 posted 2004-02-02 08:12 PM

I loved your rhyme scheme. Every word at the end of a sentence rhymed with the following and so on. It was so natural, the blend was right on. I read this aloud and it sounded as great as it did just reading it silently. I can't praise this high enough. Kie

wordwizard
Member

since 2003-09-08

Posts 483
on the way to next world

6 posted 2004-02-02 10:59 PM

nicely sentimental, too often the butterflies are replaced by cramps...keep up the writing

Suetang
Member Ascendant

since 2001-03-07

Posts 5187
Melbourne, Australia

7 posted 2004-02-03 04:06 PM

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