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Snow
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desert flower looking for rain

0 posted 2004-02-01 03:51 AM



dormant

i paste forgotten kisses on the wall
when you leave the room
and hours past
i still feel your hands
against my eyes
your lips
to my cheek
and while i
gather the memory of your body
to force away the emptiness
i'm crocheted in a web of
of trailing tongues and misgivings
on the nape of my neck


snow©2003

"...why does my skeleton pursue me
if my soul has fallen away?"
~p.neruda


© Copyright 2004 Snow - All Rights Reserved
Richy
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1 posted 2004-02-01 04:00 AM




Hi Snow,

This is so heartwarming.

I know this feeling so well.

Thank You
I needed this.




garysgirl
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2 posted 2004-02-01 04:41 AM


Snow, this is very sweet.  
Hugs  
Ethel

Sadelite
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3 posted 2004-02-01 05:20 AM


Snow,
  You've evoked me into feeling this bitter-sweet one that lingers each time I read it. Nice write!
                    Sadelite  

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4 posted 2004-02-01 05:01 PM




(big angel hugs) Awwwwwwww, this is beautiful, sweet friend, there come times where the buds are dormant but the roots are always in the ground and love leaves traces of ambrosia and honey behind! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Snow, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

steavenr
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5 posted 2004-02-04 03:45 PM


this one neeeeds to be seen again...loved the line:
"i
gather the memory of your body
to force away the emptiness "

Grover
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6 posted 2004-02-04 04:10 PM


A very good poem. Grover.
Jack- In- The- Green
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The green woodlands.
7 posted 2004-02-05 07:52 AM


Snow   brilliant poetry from your dark and cold heart, my woodlands do not like too much snow,but they can bear a dusting of white beauty.
Tell me do you like lakes and sea's with a ''watermark''?


Jack.


Have you seen jack-in -the green he taps his cain on the ground and signals the snowdrops it's time to grow.

Snow
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desert flower looking for rain
8 posted 2004-02-05 09:11 AM


richy, i'm glad you could get something you needed from this read, thank you!


ethel, thank you very much.

sadelite, i like knowing my words can bring about a feeling that won't let go :-) , thank you!

noah, thank you so much for your heartfelt thoughts.

steaven, thank you very much!!

grover, glad you liked it, thank you.

jack, not really sure what to say... i don't have a dark cold heart.... but i thank you for reading.
snow

"yet each man kills the thing he loves
by each let this be heard,
some do it with a bitter look,
some with a flattering word"
oscar wilde

Michelle_loves_Mike
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9 posted 2004-02-05 09:44 AM


.........PUUURRRRRRR.........
Michelle

I wish all could find the true happiness I have found,,in the eyes of Mike

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