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exhale
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since 2003-06-13
Posts 646
Alberta,Canada

0 posted 2004-01-31 07:56 PM


laying in bed
mascara running down my face
stupid makeup
stupid makeup
i don't want to cry over you
and everything you mean to me
that would make it real
and i'm not ready for that
i'm not ready for love yet
am i?
i am...
break my heart and say you love me...

© Copyright 2004 Chelsea - All Rights Reserved
Grover
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since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967
London, ON, Canada
1 posted 2004-01-31 08:32 PM


Very well said... good poem. Grover.
Mistletoe Angel
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2 posted 2004-02-01 05:24 PM




(sigh) I can't decide if this is more upbeat or downbeat, sweet friend, I suppose it helps to experience the pain in order to understand and feel love as deeply as possible as then we can feel for others and emphasize! (big angel hugs) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Chelsea, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton


"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

Gemini
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since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203
Wisconsin, USA
3 posted 2004-02-01 06:06 PM


exhale- been there, splendid write, full of tender thought provoking words.
Foxyoasis
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since 2003-06-10
Posts 974
Atlantic Beach,Fla
4 posted 2004-02-01 06:46 PM


very good poem,Ive been in your shoes to many times to count

Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me.....


JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
5 posted 2004-02-01 07:31 PM


I like the intensity of this...James
iliana
Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434
USA
6 posted 2004-02-01 07:37 PM


Exhale -- Such a dynamic picture -- the mascara, the makeup -- real vs. false.  Good writing!
passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
7 posted 2004-02-02 04:56 AM


I know what you mean...I've been there a few times
ambrish
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since 2003-03-27
Posts 257
India
8 posted 2004-02-02 06:12 AM


break my heart and say you love me...
         such contrast, well placed words..

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