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misao
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0 posted 2004-01-31 01:46 PM



The love that I cry
the tears that I keep
I think of you
as I fall asleep.

The more that I beg
the more that I pled
to get you back I always succeed.

There are dreams that I keep
that have only you inside
dreams of hapiness
where the hatred has died.

© Copyright 2004 Ms Kitsune - All Rights Reserved
Sadelite
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1 posted 2004-01-31 01:59 PM


misoa,
  nicely articulated thoughts here...
      
The love that I cry
the tears that I keep
I think of you
as I fall asleep.

I enjoyed your write.  Thank you.
              Sadelite

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2 posted 2004-01-31 03:06 PM




(big angel hugs) This is a beautifully bitersweet write, dearest friend, and I wish for these dreams to come part of you in reality and bring joy and happiness to your life forever, God Bless You, let them come true, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Misao, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

garysgirl
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3 posted 2004-01-31 03:36 PM


I really liked this. I liked the
way that it sounded when read out loud.
hugs  
Ehtel

iliana
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4 posted 2004-02-01 01:36 AM


Good use of rhythm, Misao.  
serenity blaze
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5 posted 2004-02-01 06:43 PM


You are without a doubt, my favorite poet here at Passions.

(there, how was that?)

love,

mom



(bragging is a mother's right sweetie)


Grover
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6 posted 2004-02-01 06:45 PM


Good work! Grover.
Poet deVine
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7 posted 2004-02-01 06:52 PM


Beautiful sentiments!! This is really good. I'd like to see you write something with serenity though - there! that's a challenge!
Enchantress
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8 posted 2004-02-01 07:00 PM


Very very nicely done...an dmuch enjoyed!
Hugs~

~ Is that love I see in your eyes...
  or merely a reflection of mine? ~

vlraynes
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9 posted 2004-02-01 07:05 PM



"The love that I cry
the tears that I keep
I think of you
as I fall asleep."

This is wonderful, Misao...

Love the rhythm and rhyme, as well
as the sentiment... very nicely done

Seconding PdV's request... would love
to see you duet with Serenity...smile

Hugs,
~Vicky

"When the power of love overcomes the love
of power the world will know peace."
--Jimi Hendrix

nakdthoughts
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10 posted 2004-02-01 07:19 PM


I agree with all said above..
nice writing..a duet with mom would be nice.

M

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11 posted 2004-02-05 10:41 AM


aw, this is fantastic.  Enjoyed your words much.
JamesMichael
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12 posted 2004-02-05 05:27 PM


Enjoyed...James
Martie
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13 posted 2004-02-05 07:53 PM


misao

I can relate to this feeling...very well done!  

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