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Jabberwocky (my version anyway)
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Jabberwocky (my version anyway) |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Jabberwocky When little Alice came to tea in gardens trimmed with violets, she held the cup right daintily, a dormouse nestled in her dress, the hatter nibbling watercress, and darling Alice winked at me. You doctors push sobriety and try to catch me in your nets of gray-tinged dull reality. The red queen screams while you assess, but I’m safe in my idyll-ness with little Alice on my knee until it falls, that ebon eve when Cheshire smiles pass out regrets and hookah-smoking insects leave us to the whiffling in the grass, the burbled hiss, the stinky breath, the sharp-fanged memories we flee. It’s then white rabbits dream of geese, of smooth green lawns and croquet sets, but those of us who wake can see the jabberwock, by moonlight less a dragon than a priest to bless us with this one last chance to be. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
I LIKE IT! I do, I do, I do. Especailly that second stanza. I raise my tea in toast to the, with just a hint of sanity. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Meanwhile the Mad Hatter is consorting for the Red Queen and under his hat there's so much anarchy the Tulgey Wood is sleeping! (big angel hugs) This is so novel, sweet friend, I was wondering by the title how you'd approach it, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Nancy, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Nan darling one, I’m here I read and Oh what a delight it is, how often your words spin a world of wonder and delight. That you have managed to out Jabbawocky the original is just a sample of how great you are. Love this darling heart it is excellent writing and as always you shine like the star you are and forever Mushy   Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds but I can face the future with courage brave and bold Footprints In My Heart Kethry |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
and Jabberwock is moretimes soft to hold the passing of the days where dreams are kept and held aloft and grief is stored in distant bays sometimes the day has need of craze to keep the home inact to croft Nan, to say I loved this would be an understatement. To say I am jealous of your talent would be a mockery so I will just say imitation is the sincerest form of flattery. Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
fantastic!....lovely wonderful...  ..id like to put this in my library! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Nan~ Oh my ... I LOVE IT !!! Whant an incredible talent you are~ This is soooooooooooooo good~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
You have definitely outdone yourself with this one. I loved every line of it. Thanx! |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Andrew, I raise my glass to you. *I have ice in my tea, actually. Noah, thank you so much. You are always there with a kind word. Marsha, I'm glad you're here! I seldom have time anymore, but I love to come here when I can. Keth, I love your take on the jabberwock! muted, what a compliment you pay me. I'm so proud to go in your library. Marge, hugs all over the place to you, girl. Magnus, I'm so glad to hear from you. I'm pleased you like it. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Your cleverness always makes me smile, Nan. There's a lot more to this poem than mere lines...love your talent. |
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wordwizard Member
since 2003-09-08
Posts 483on the way to next world |
a fresh resilient reminder of Alice and her tea companions...nice take on that |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Delightful! Grover. |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Thanks, 'deer. I've always loved Alice and her cronies. Martin, it's good to hear from you. I'm glad you liked it. Grover, it's so nice of you to stop by. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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