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Poetics Critique Speak
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Poetics Critique Speak |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Flame me not on the lone prairie As I offer a flower for you to see, Or a sunset, Or bassinette, Or what ever about the poem will be. But tell me that you see it Or could be it If there’s nothing physical described But not just a diatribe, Add some feeling to it For that is what the poet meant That why the words are just so bent, Add some feeling to it. Of late, conversationally topics flame, the alley is roaring but still stays restrained, Critique me on the lone prairie Discuss the flowers in poetry Let the sun slip around to rise again As we take the view of a new day Talking to those who need talking to along the way, Politely With Poetics Gloom |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
well I thought I responded but it didn't seem to take... I said I like your flowers and when you write of that "fluff" ...I mean stuff just kidding  M and I am not a critic except when dealing with spelling... |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Interesting response to the "current events." Well thought out and presented in a subtle, yet meaningful manner. And I hate to use the word "cute," but it applies at the same time, considering how amusing I find the whole subject.  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I have never been much of a critic myself, and usually don't know what to say after I read a poem. I always love to read you Gloom |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Since I'm hardly ever around, I don't know what this is in reference to, but I don't care, I like it. I like the way you said it, and I have always agreed with what you have said. You can critique form, and help people to say what they want to say better. But you should never criticize them. Just my two cents. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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misao Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 50 |
 You are truely a poet who knows lots of things. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Well taken.....you show off, you.  .......jo |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
You are not only a gentleman poet, you are a WISE gentleman poet. |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
...well...I'm certainly am a sucker for the crisp and clever write...even when I don't understand it or know what it's about...I just think it was great to work the word basinette into the poem... Seriously, it was an excellent write. |
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Kie Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 77USA |
Very wise and intuitive. Amazingly the point/points you made were so poetic that even if it had been harsh, I couldn't have resisted reading it. |
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wintertao Member
since 2003-11-17
Posts 366Okaloosa Island, FL |
You over use - Or - in the first stanza, and then....oh my bad. Just Kiddin he he great poem, loved it. huzzzzaaaaahhhhhhhhHH! |
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