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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain 
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 silent tears who gives a (insert censored word) {being sweet doesn't mean those words never cross the tongue, which caressed your ear} if there's still one more beat of her heart left before it meets with the toe of your boot while the stars grew weary of holding out their arms she fell crucified by the willows and he shook the tree with "don't go" and she cried "give me back the stars" "i need you", he admitted and hope, like love dangled and wept soaking the roots with fate's blood before him she stood "i love you" was whispered by two hearts still beating, but staked to the willow and she took from her eyes two stars still alive and placed them where his heart used to be "i won't leave you" but still those two hearts, stay pierced, to the tree beatingtogether, and apart ©snow "...why does my skeleton pursue me |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Good poem... nice word mechanics. Enjoyed the symbols! Grover. |
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McLean Member
since 2004-01-05
Posts 484state of marital bliss |
Oh, my...is that what I think it is? In the picture? Oh, dear... I haven't gotten to read your write yet, because I was distracted by the photo. McLean |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
That was absolutely amazing. I didn’t expect that Snow Kind of knocked me back for a second I really enjoyed this! Thank You  |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Snow this was your best....brilliant...you had me interested in every line, poetry at its best! ~my favorite ~ARH  love and hugs Open your eyes, open your mind, open your heart, let me come in and show you love.....~ARH |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yep McLean, I think that is what you think it is...LOL great piece of work here...I'm in awe |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
and she took from her eyes two stars still alive and placed them where his heart used to be "i won't leave you" Love the longing in this tender beauty of yours. Seems your poetry is as soft as your pen name. |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
i'm not sure what anybody sees in that picture other than someone in pain... if you're seeing something sexual (by the comment)... then i'm sorry that wasn't the intent at all. (because i obviously don't see it and it wouldn't have gone with my work at all) thank you all for the comments.. richy, it's good to hear you didn't expect it... that made me feel like i accomplished what i wanted. ARH, to know that you were interested in every line, is one of the nicest things i've heard. again.. thank you all so much!! snow "...why does my skeleton pursue me |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big angel hugs) This is very sad but well-written, dearest friend, it hurts to be both pinned down and apart, love needs to dissolve together to work! (sad sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Snow, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you But if the bright lights don't receive you You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20 |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
ahhhh noah, you're the smile my day always seeks ... thank you so much for your very heartfelt words... ~hugs~ snow "...why does my skeleton pursue me |
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