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Tais
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0 posted 2004-01-30 11:43 AM



We existed  through
absence of reality
Each other we knew
within one mortality

Love pictures we drew
inside pasts’ vitality
Making life so new
in perfect totality

Vision in review
of passion’s mentality
For our love, we threw...
far away our sanity

Painted skies so blue
pictured without vanity
With a clear, pure view
of endless humanity

Within love so true
we lived through finality
Together we flew
in spirituality

© Copyright 2004 Tais Lintz - All Rights Reserved
Gentle Spirit
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1 posted 2004-01-30 11:45 AM


This is beautiful Tais.  Welcome to Passions.
Tais
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2 posted 2004-01-30 11:45 AM


This poem above, is something different I tried to do. I tried to send a message of dimensionality (in a spiritual way) and at the same time, put words which rhyme with it as well throughout the poem.

It was just a fun thing I did. But I like the results.

But I would like to know if you like it too.

Is there something in this poem, that I could change, or add to make it more interesting?

Thanks,

Tais

Tais
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3 posted 2004-01-30 11:46 AM


Thank you Gentle Spirit!

Tais

Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 2004-01-30 11:50 AM


Tais
Good write, enjoyed the read.

passing shadows
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5 posted 2004-01-30 12:34 PM


I am enjoying your work...thank you
Ludo
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6 posted 2004-01-30 08:38 PM


Brilliant. I love the definite sense of dimensionality and science, which you really convey well in your work.
Grover
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7 posted 2004-01-30 08:42 PM


A great piece... good rhyming scheme! Grover.
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8 posted 2004-01-30 11:41 PM




(smiles) Your love is destined to transcend any dimension as you always follow your heart and nurture the voice within, sweet friend, God Bless You, it is fathomless and an ultimate blessing, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Tais, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

A Romantic Heart
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9 posted 2004-01-31 02:21 AM


I felt the oneness through the words you have used together~

Welcome to PIP!

again it was a great expression of yourself!
~ARH
love and hugs

Open your eyes, open your mind, open your heart, let me come in and show you love.....~ARH

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