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steavenr
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0 posted 2004-01-28 06:27 PM


(so you won't have to look up the form, it is written in the following:
line 1-1 syllable
line 2-2 syllables
line 3-3 syllables
line 4-4 syllables
line 5-10 syllables
It is called a tetractys)

sage
advice
is given
to separate
fools from themselves, lest wisdom become tired


© Copyright 2004 Steaven R Snow - All Rights Reserved
Marge Tindal
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1 posted 2004-01-28 06:53 PM


Steaven~
Thank you for all the sharing you do~
Excellent !!!
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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2 posted 2004-01-28 07:00 PM


oh i like this form...really nice!

BluesSerenade
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3 posted 2004-01-29 08:30 PM


Those are wise words steavenr~
and the form looks good on ya!

Bravo Sir~

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4 posted 2004-01-29 09:30 PM




(smiles) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is beautiful, there will always be teachers and masters that help instruct the young and bring them the wisdom they desire, this is wonderful, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Steaven, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

passing shadows
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displaced
5 posted 2004-01-30 04:47 AM


awesome!
Richy
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6 posted 2004-01-30 05:19 AM




Wow Steaven, it's a good thing it stopped when it did... I had run out of fingers and toes...

Tis quite the interesting...

As for me, I'm having a hard enough time finding a word to rhyme with purple...

Whatdaya think about maple surple?

Any who... I liked the poem...

You know,

there's no fool, like an old fool...

Just ask, any young fool.  


Take Care


jaicie114
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7 posted 2004-01-30 03:00 PM


steavenr...

I don't know if I like your writing more or the fact that you are giving us such a miraculous education while entertaining us with "sage advice"!  For both...thank you! This was wonderful.

Love and Light...jc

p.s. Richy...purple is one of three words in the English language that does not have a rhyme...orange is another & I can't remember the third.  Hope this helps!  

This I know as Truth...we are all Beings of Light.

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8 posted 2004-01-30 03:18 PM




Orange
Bornge?
Fornge?

Huh?

Oh! Thank you Jaicie!

How'd you know I was struggling
with that one too?



Well so much for my poem
on Bornge Surple... lol

Pardon me Steaven,
I hope you didn't mind?  


Seymour Tabin
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9 posted 2004-01-30 03:23 PM


steavenr
Thank you, enjoyed the read.

A Romantic Heart
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10 posted 2004-01-31 02:30 AM


What a unique way of writing poetry...

~ARh
love and hugs

Open your eyes, open your mind, open your heart, let me come in and show you love.....~ARH

McLean
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11 posted 2004-02-02 07:53 PM


LOVE IT!  Structure turns me on...

I'm off now, to write one of these!

GREAT inspiration!!!

McLean

McLean
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12 posted 2004-02-02 07:59 PM


Richy...

I think it's silver.

Purple, Orange and Silver.

  McLean

steavenr
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13 posted 2004-02-02 09:11 PM



McLean & Richy

Purple, Orange and Silver

The burglar stumbled down the stairwell
broke his leg and turned it purple
I knew he hoped that it would get well
When he wrapped it in the blanket thermal

If it simply were not for that blessed floor flange
(The one that caused his mis-step)
His leg would have not turned from purple to a brilliant orange
And his freedom he just might have kept


But it was Christmas time when the halls were all decked out
With wreaths of green and bells of silver
For which if he had paid attention as he stole about
He would not have paid the penalty of lameness for that which he did pilfer

steavenr
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14 posted 2004-02-02 09:19 PM



Marge, thank you kindly…I always enjoy your beautiful writes…I cherish your comments

Muted…glad you like the form

BluesSerenade, thank you…I like short verses (perhaps because I am too lazy to type longer ones)

Noah, thank you…your words were so kind

Passing shadows…thank you very much

Jaicie, you are so very, very kind,  thank you

Seymour, thanks for taking the time to read and comment

ARH, thank so much…I like different things, too

Sunshine
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15 posted 2004-02-03 11:42 AM



Pray tell, what is this style called?
I like the way it delivers a message!

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16 posted 2004-02-03 11:46 AM


steaven, I really like this form, and
the way you wrote it. I like the
way you say so much in so few words.
Hugs  
Ethel

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17 posted 2004-02-03 11:50 AM


steaven ... I like this form very much and your words hold a lot of wisdom.

Huggles, Marti

I take no credit for my poems. Although I write them, I feel
more like I transcribe them. It's just a matter of listening.


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