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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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On winter's day You bring to mind The bleak emptiness Of the lunar landscape That gave you name Not contented state of mind Cold steel bench Sends seep of shiver Up my spine No warmth of wood Yields to lovers' carvings Within your boundaries And the fountains That give you life Are silent, dry Like my burning throat Do they ache, too? In just a moment Another leaf rustle or two I'll put on my working face And make sure it's tranquil Not streaked with tears |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Suthern beloved one, this is simply STUNNING, how you manage to evoke such depth of feeling I’ll never know I only know you do, and you do it like no other can too. Sometimes I read something and I can see the picture, why is do you think that those times are mostly when I read your beauty? Possibly because YOUR writing is a shining wonder to see, it has a depth that few have, always it is good writing sometimes, and more often than not it is simply incredible writing, and this is. I swear if I could even think of lines that ran with the beauty you compress into every single one of yours I would be half the writer you are. This is real poetry beloved one and YOU are a true poet, love it and love you muchly I am not biased I am truthful this is outstandingly beautiful work as always Mushy   and to think I only stopped by on my way to the archives!!  Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
And I got to be first too, now that is special and forever Mushy Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big angel hugs) Tranquility always centers within oneself, as YOU have the ability to bring stillness of heart to you! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, may the warmth of tranquility bring peace to you always, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Suthern, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
suthern, What a lovely sigh. |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
"In just a moment Another leaf rustle or two I'll put on my working face And make sure it's tranquil Not streaked with tears" in the literal sense i actually have cried on the bench at the park many many occassions, so i know what its like to have to put the brave face on before someone sees me! im gonna give ya a big hug ~Dawn |
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Youngatheart Member
since 2003-12-30
Posts 333 |
I love reading your work. You always seem to make such simple feelings so majestic with your words. You are so very talented and so sensitive. |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Ahhh Suthern, I hope there's no tears. And it sounds like you have a sore throat too. Those dang steel benches... And through all that, you still manage to write this nice poem. Now that's really special. I hope you feel better soon. Take Care, Richy |
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jaicie114 Senior Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 750On the edge of forever |
Starkly beautiful, suthern! Thank you! Love and Light...jc This I know as Truth...we are all Beings of Light. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
All of the above and more....we've all done this I believe...great job gal.. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Cold steel bench Sends seep of shiver Up my spine No warmth of wood Yields to lovers' carvings Within your boundaries Wonderful verse that is. You captured a place in time so well suthern gal! Huggin' you hon~ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
how deep this goes inside me...yes |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Laura, your secret is safe with me....I won't tell a soul that you had doubts about posting this, questioned whether it was good enough.... The answer's still yes, by the way. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Rat....have you noticed that about her?...She needs a size twelve kick up her...uh, um, ego to get her motivated... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Marsha: You definitely ARE biased... and special no matter what your response number. *S* Thank you so much, my friend. *S* M'toe: Thank you very much! *S* I can always find Tranquility Park... even if tranquility doesn't park in my emotions. *S* Seymour: Thank you, lovely Sy. *S* muted: I know that literal, too. *S* Hugs, dear lady... and thank you! Youngatheart: Your kindness just floors me... thank you so very much! *S* Richy: Right across the street is Heritage Park... complete with a pond, gazebo and wooden benches tucked into corners of green. *S* You'd think I'd choose comfort and coddling, right? LOL But I just miss more intensely there. *S* Thank you! *S* jaicie114: Thank you very much... I'm glad you liked! *S* Blues: Hugs accepted with alacrity, sweet lady... thank you so much! *S* Ratleader: ROFL @ your secret keeping... I can never thank you enough for not publicizing my doubts and insecurities. LOL You are right, my friend... yes... thank you! *S* Toerag: Now I was gonna thank you most kindly for that great job comment... but now you're wanting to give my ego a boost... er... I mean boot??? LOL Thank you! suthern scoots out of kicking distance *G* |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wonderful Ruth! I loved the visuals in this ... beautifully described, and the title suits the piece perfectly. I really enjoyed this!  Well done indeed!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This poem is truly quite amazing. A gem to keep for future reads. I admire your talent. Wonderful, wonderful, wonderful Liz |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Kit and Elizabeth: Thank you both so very much... Such acceptance from poets I admire so much is greatly appreciated! *S* |
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