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whiteycg
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since 2004-01-24
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0 posted 2004-01-25 09:15 PM


Knowing an alcoholic can be tough on everyone... Sometimes people ruin their lives before they know how it happened...


JIM AND JACK

When was the last time we cuddled together
I look back and wonder how it could have been better
Back when you were mine and we had nothing to worry
But I drank so much that you left in a fury

You’re gone now and I’m alone here to think
What would I have said without that last drink
I wish I could feel the touch of your lips
Been so long since I’ve tasted your kiss

Play Chorus

Why did we have to end it this way
I take it all back just come home and stay
Why didn’t I just try to make it work out
Can’t even remember what the fight was about

My friends have all left me I pissed them away
Couldn’t let me be when I had my bad days
Its all so clear to me now what they think
Its what I said when I had too much to drink

Play Chorus

That’s the last time that I’ll be left in the breeze
I see I’m unwelcome and its time that I leave
Gotta be brave and hold back the tears
Forget how easy it will be to disappear

The drinks possess me and change my mood
I’m getting rid of the bottles just for you
There’s more out there for me so I’ve been told
I’m taking my trip to the end of the old

Play Chorus X 2

Chorus:

Jim and Jack you are my only
Tip up slowly and go right to sleep
When its us together I’m not so lonely
In the morning we’ll hit the streets

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J.Samm
Member
since 2004-01-12
Posts 415
Iloilo City, Philippines
1 posted 2004-01-25 10:32 PM


welcome to the forum! interesting write. i bet a many could relate.
exhale
Senior Member
since 2003-06-13
Posts 646
Alberta,Canada
2 posted 2004-01-26 12:39 PM


hey there! welcome!
your a beautiful writer, you remind me of this artist i adore,have you heard of a badn called Dashboard Confessional?
well you remind me of Chris Carraba,your writting style i mean
and coming from me,seeing as they're my favorite band,thats a huuggeee compliment
good write

ggrn3
Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433
Nahunta Georgia U.S.
3 posted 2004-01-26 04:55 AM


All u need is a little music in the background.
Well written.

Garfield

Beasley
Senior Member
since 2003-11-28
Posts 682
Cheboygan,MI USA
4 posted 2004-01-26 10:59 AM


Thank you for posting this. It makes one think about how much pain there is for the alcoholic. We need to be reminded.
Barb

Jessie Carstein
Junior Member
since 2004-01-08
Posts 41

5 posted 2004-01-26 11:01 AM


it's a lovely piece, I am just curious about what this chorus is that you've referred to.  It's a good piece
whiteycg
Junior Member
since 2004-01-24
Posts 11

6 posted 2004-01-26 01:23 PM


The chorus is as follows...

Chorus:

Jim and Jack you are my only
Tip up slowly and go right to sleep
When its us together I’m not so lonely
In the morning we’ll hit the streets

This song is written about a friend who i know in his mid thirties... He had spent the last few years living as a bum... Finally he has had his wake up call... And now he's in college!

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