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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving 
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I've been feeling a little tequila in my sunrise. Swallowing down those liquid red hues that always complimented the blues.. As the glass starts to dry you go and pour it on thick lettin' that ice rattle as its risin' to the top... I'm gonna drink you down to the last drop. So much for sangria on the beach and ripe fruits on the vine, when all you left me with is cactus and the worm at the bottom of the bottle. |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
amen !!! |
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gadfly4you Junior Member
since 2004-01-24
Posts 37 |
Very well said...swallowing colors......interesting....sounds like fun in another setting....I ate the worm once......never again :-) |
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McLean Member
since 2004-01-05
Posts 484state of marital bliss |
fantabulous write, my friend! I don't drink...not because I think drinking is a no-no, but because I'm allregic to something in most alcohols. I'm good with Bacardi, though!  McLean |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice silky flow...James |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I saw this from two ways, and both ways work for me. Momentary bliss and sobering realities-- nicely done, muted.  |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) I'm zero-tolerant on those kinds of drinks, but I'm up to a fruit punch or guava anytime, yay! (big angel hugs) This is such sweet and fanciful imagery, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Dawn, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
1SL: thank you for that fabulous "amen" gadfly: could be fun for sure (in another setting)...haha, ive never eaten the worm, tequila is harsh enough as it is without having to "chew" it!McLean: bacardi eh? well grab the coconuts, we're doing it Malibu style! James: thank you serenity: thank you, and yes i suppose both ways sorta co-exist Noah: fruit punch is just as colourful (and mighty tasty)...*hug* vandana: thank you |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Brava! Brava! Great metaphors! |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
Nice...eat the worm, and love sangria. Jason |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Swallowing down those liquid red hues that always complimented the blues.. Of course... they sometimes turn the blues to black. *G* I like this very much, muted... great work! *S* |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Oh yeah, this is very good! Grover. |
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