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gadfly4you
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0 posted 2004-01-25 02:59 PM



The pictures of ewe
are still plastered over my walls.
Fragile  and regal, ewe gaze down upon me
never expecting to be shorn.
Our friends come to the house,
Make awkward faces behind my back
because the pictures of ewe
are still there.
“Is he mad?” they ask when alone.
My callous indifference
to the needs of ewe,
always expecting ewe to be around.
As I lie to sleep,
a crumpled heap heaving tears
under a woolen blanket ewe created,
I count ewe as solace,
and realize ewe have gone the way
of the wooly mammoth.

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McLean
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1 posted 2004-01-25 03:05 PM


I'm allergic to wool things.  How about ewe?(chuckle, chuckle)

McLean

gadfly4you
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2 posted 2004-01-25 03:06 PM


Laughing....
Wish I was :-)

lovejunkie
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3 posted 2004-01-25 03:08 PM


The ewe thing is really distracting. I'm sure it has a purpose, but I think it takes away from the poem.

"All you need is love..." -The Beatles

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4 posted 2004-01-25 03:14 PM


*giggle*
this is a cute poem talking about something that sounds painful...hmmm..cute and painful...sounds like hiding to me!

but puts a smile on our faces

ThisDiamond
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5 posted 2004-01-25 03:21 PM


Baaa ewe tiful

TD

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6 posted 2004-01-25 05:21 PM




(big hugggsssssss) Oh dearest friend, reading the last line was somewhat disturbing to read as it is so true. Jesus gave the lamb her woolly coat and to see it grow rougher and dense shows the roughness the whole meaning has taken! (sad sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

ThisDiamond
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7 posted 2004-01-25 05:50 PM


Ah to be the gadfly.
I really like your work.
It reminds me of someone I know personally...and although I feel the deeper meanings...sometimes it's best to remain in the ecotones.
Don't hesitate to delve deeper.
TD

SmartChick
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8 posted 2004-01-25 05:53 PM


This is a very nice poem.
Sadelite
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9 posted 2004-01-29 10:47 PM


gadfly,
I rather liked the ewe- felt it lent to a deeper concept or feeling to those that were familiar with shepherding.  Being raised on a farm, I'm aware of that naked feeling that a sheep must have after being shorn to share its rich lanolin wool to comfort us... Sorry to hear about the extinct wooly mammoth. I like the way you double layered this.                ~SAdelite~
                  

[This message has been edited by Sadelite (01-31-2004 02:03 PM).]

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10 posted 2004-01-30 03:54 AM


very clever
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