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lovejunkie
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since 2003-12-31
Posts 93
Indiana

0 posted 2004-01-25 02:44 PM


You don't own me
My body's returning
in pieces
An eyelash
An earlobe
A fingernail
Escaping your wicked embrace
My bottom lip
Unattached to yours
longs to refuse your call
You've had the pieces
so long...
They barely fit me anymore

My soul's digging,
buried in a coffin
lined with posters of you
Surrounded by the tangles of
sex and true love
The two are confused
in the darkness of
my coffin made from
your wood

My mind's consumed by you
I can't give it up
A thought slips
Rarely
Without your name

My eyelashes my earlobes
My lips my fingernails
Can't chase you out of my head
You have the rest of me
My heart belongs to you
Stepping on it
With my own foot
You trick me every time

"All you need is love..." -The Beatles

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McLean
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since 2004-01-05
Posts 484
state of marital bliss
1 posted 2004-01-25 02:47 PM


and I think of Mr. Potato Head, forgive me for my laughter!  This is interesting, and I shall pay it a read again soon, when I'm not so giddy!



McLean

wickedbeautifulpoetry
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since 2004-01-03
Posts 84
Indiana, USA
2 posted 2004-01-25 02:50 PM


I love your hidden messages darling.
Good write.

MexicoCityBlues
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since 2004-01-04
Posts 48
The Point of Know Return
3 posted 2004-01-25 02:55 PM


Sorry, Steph, but I agree with McLean... Mr. Potato Head runs through my mind throughout this. Although I get most of it, this isn't your strongest work.

"The story of life is quicker than the wink of an eye. The story of love is Hello and Goodbye. Until we meet again..." -Jimi Hendrix

Mistletoe Angel
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4 posted 2004-01-25 05:40 PM




(big angel hugs) Oh Steph, I must admit I too thought of Mr. Potato Head but took it as a serious metaphor or analogy and just felt this was like...being broken! (sad sigh) I send angel comfort hugs your way, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Steph, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

iliana
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since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434
USA
5 posted 2004-02-16 05:48 PM


This was a tremendously powerful lament!
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