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0 posted 2004-01-25 12:36 PM


Outer Space

Maybe they were right, their geocentric
inclinations the way of it after all. Maybe their
intimations about crystal spheres with stars affixed,
gyrations of the planets geared in spaceless
ordinations, all the clear and faceless
permutations a glass ceiling to the likes of us,
generalizations about gravity and such, mere
obfuscations grounded in our pointless
ruminations, adding up to groundless
speculations, with no applications to be found,
machinations where our feckless delta-vee
manipulations fail, hit blank dead-ends
because we will never go there.


© Copyright 2004 Ed Ratledge - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2004-01-25 01:11 AM


Salutations!
This should get you
standing ovations!
I like the style you used here.

McLean

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2 posted 2004-01-25 01:44 AM


Whoa there, I can't think that fast!  This is a keeper after I get my dictionary out and look up a couple of words!  I pictured the celestral globes showing the constellations within the universe.  Neat write!
              Sadelite

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3 posted 2004-01-25 06:41 AM


Great language, Ratleader...:-)
I see no reason to go there at this time, lets solve the problems here first.
enjoyed
________ice
  ><>

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4 posted 2004-01-25 11:05 AM


Hey Ed...You made me look up a few words too, but I really didnt need to in order to get enjoyment from this or to understand it's meaning.  I'd like to go there, but it is so far...so far!  Hugs!
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5 posted 2004-01-25 11:11 AM


Such is the endless struggle,  huh Ed?

You write of it well.  

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6 posted 2004-01-25 03:18 PM


I love this. *S* Love the language of it, the way it builds speed until the reader is glued to chair by the force... which makes the screeching halt all the more powerful. And I love the hope for otherwise that insists on peeking through... this is excellent!


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7 posted 2004-01-25 04:36 PM


This is fabulous, like a conversational blurb--I felt like I overheard a bit of a promising conversation.

Enjoyed the format of this, and the message reminded me of all the fantastic stories about the future and space age living that we've been told. (There's a commercial I love dearly that depicts a handsome bald black gentleman looking around a city asking, "Where are the flying cars? They said there'd be flying cars.")



I like this style from you Ed.

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8 posted 2004-01-25 04:40 PM




(sigh) Oh Ed, you are so right, dearest friend, I find the whole Mars mission budget to be a waste of time as our own home Earth should come first and we should leave the exploring to telescopes from our very own back porches! God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ed, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

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9 posted 2004-01-28 08:59 AM


Oh my...glad I'm looking around...missed this on the first time it was at the top.


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10 posted 2004-01-28 05:59 PM


And we don't need to go there, though the pictures are fun.
The outer just keeps getting more outer.

(I think we ought to turn around, while we can.)

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