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0 posted 2004-01-24 02:37 PM



That drive inside
keeps tearing up the highway.
Going so fast
forgot to say goodbye.
Just thought you'd still be waiting
when i got home.
But somehow
went and lost my way,
and with the headlights muted
cant see in front of me.
Never really had a direction
and walking in circles
used to suit me just fine,
but running felt free.
All the guidance i needed
was right here
on the back of
that postcard reading
"wish you were here"
oh, dreaming is a fine destination
for dreamers.
Think i may have
forgotten how.
Cause im blinded by the pain
of scenery rushing by
and broken love songs
on the radio.
Must be a weak signal,
poor reception,
Or maybe Im just lost.

© Copyright 2004 Dawn van Krieken-Smith - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2004-01-24 02:53 PM


And this soupy warmth of confusion settled on my roller-coaster as I read this...you've mastered the way to describe the most intangible of feelings, making me realize that they are real to not only just me.  I enjoy reading your posts much.

McLean

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2 posted 2004-01-24 03:23 PM


PoetessInDawn~

'walking in circles
used to suit me just fine,
but running felt free'


Oh, Lordy ... I love this thought~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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3 posted 2004-01-24 03:24 PM




(big angel hugs) I think ever too much the tears can cloud up our minds and give us bad frequencies somedays that only make us remember the misfortunes! (sad sigh) Turn the dial and listen to your heart and you will find true joy, yay, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Dawn, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton


"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

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4 posted 2004-01-24 04:57 PM


I liked your poem

~chelsea~

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5 posted 2004-01-24 05:23 PM


Beautifully said.
Love, Margherita

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6 posted 2004-01-24 07:10 PM


enjoyed
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7 posted 2004-01-24 09:30 PM


Beautiful mix of soft rhythms and depth of feeling...moves beautifully and honestly...much enjoyed.....Paul
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8 posted 2004-01-25 09:36 PM


I really enjoyed your poem Dawn,
but this really got to me...

Never really had a direction
and walking in circles
used to suit me just fine,
but running felt free.
All the guidance i needed
was right here
on the back of
that postcard reading
"wish you were here"

Love it~

I'm so glad you're here!!

muted
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Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving
9 posted 2004-01-26 03:35 AM


thank you
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10 posted 2004-01-27 12:55 PM


gosh!

I know how you feel...maybe we're all lost...

great piece, made me think

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11 posted 2004-01-27 07:47 PM


Muted isn't the proper pen name for you because you have so much wisdom, talent and write wonderfully. I really enjoy your work!!
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