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Desperate Envy

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JosephF
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0 posted 09-01-2006 06:18 AM       View Profile for JosephF   Email JosephF   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JosephF

Standing in the shadow of your glory,
Is this a horror story?
As I struggle to control my fury
The counter-balance goes topsy-turvy

Irritation,
Sensation,
Deliberation,
Fixation

I am forever blind by your everlasting beauty,
Too precious to touch,
But it tortures me, every single day
You take a step closer, and it rains rose petals

From the Highest Heaven, to the Deepest Depths of Hell,
I would follow you,
Like a man possessed,
A Fixed thought, drilled into my skull.

Expectation,
Elation,
Imitation,
Confrontation

So here I am, telling a story,
That would usually sound so corny,
Shall I release my fury?
Or continue to stand in the shadow of your glory?

© Copyright 2006 Joseph F - All Rights Reserved
patience_iago
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1 posted 09-01-2006 03:38 PM       View Profile for patience_iago   Email patience_iago   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for patience_iago

I really like the way this is written.

"There are some days where i believe i might die of an overdose of satisfaction"
-Dali

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2 posted 09-01-2006 09:40 PM       View Profile for *Alli4000*   Email *Alli4000*   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for *Alli4000*

Agreed with the person above me, this poem is written really well.  I especially loved the line: "You take a step closer, and it rains rose petals"

Great write, hope to read more from you soon!

~Alli~
mgoodman1989
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3 posted 09-03-2006 12:44 PM       View Profile for mgoodman1989   Email mgoodman1989   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mgoodman1989

Your a somewhat new member, so WELCOME!! Pip happens to be a great place to get your poetry out, and to be heard.

With that said. AMAZING poem Joseph! I really enjoyed reading this, and since this is the very first poem I've read by you, I'm not ready to give too much feedback. I enjoyed your piece, so lets see some more!!!

Much love,
Michelle

*I love him oh yes I do, he's for me and not for you, and if by chance you take my place, I'll take my fist and smash your face!*

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4 posted 09-04-2006 10:38 PM       View Profile for hunnie_girl   Email hunnie_girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for hunnie_girl

i haven't read anything by you so i read this and i liked it it made a nice poem... i will look out for more of your work in the future
hunnie*

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