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A fatal distraction

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stargal
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0 posted 09-01-2006 01:11 AM       View Profile for stargal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for stargal


From twilight to dusk her heart seduces
Through the windows of a delicate soul
Those haunted eyes, whispering a forsaken lullaby
An abyss of bittersweet, concrete, memories
Intoxicating all who surround her frigid façade
With beautifully induced words not meant to allure
She captures you without one thought
Stealing you away like a fluttering scarlet carousel
Attracting your attention in your move of a fatal distraction…

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
–Socrates
                     @-->---

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JosephF
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1 posted 09-01-2006 06:09 AM       View Profile for JosephF   Email JosephF   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JosephF

Excellent, Pure Brilliance
patience_iago
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2 posted 09-01-2006 03:39 PM       View Profile for patience_iago   Email patience_iago   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for patience_iago

I love this, i reread it like a dozen times, amazing.

A few lines really get you.

"There are some days where i believe i might die of an overdose of satisfaction"
-Dali

bekahlekah45
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3 posted 09-01-2006 04:58 PM       View Profile for bekahlekah45   Email bekahlekah45   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bekahlekah45

woah. i dont think my mind can comprehend all this at once!  once again, i am amazed at your talent.  looks like your not-being-able-to-write episode wore off...??
hahaha

amazing piece stargal
Tempest
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4 posted 09-01-2006 05:09 PM       View Profile for Tempest   Email Tempest   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tempest

hmmm...I really need to think about this one to comprehend exactly what it is your trying to get across. And after i do i am in shock at the depth. I find that as i look at more and more of your poetry, i really admire the creative mind you were given. Your poetry really does have to be taken seriously both as a poem, and as a piece of soul.
                         Exelent poem,
                                 ~Tempest~

This is the only life you have, so live it to be remembered

*Alli4000*
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5 posted 09-01-2006 09:44 PM       View Profile for *Alli4000*   Email *Alli4000*   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for *Alli4000*

Wonderful write! I love the style and the way you wrote this.
Hope to read more soon.

~Alli~
stargal
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6 posted 09-03-2006 12:25 AM       View Profile for stargal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for stargal

Thanks for the comments ya'll, much appreciated by me

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
–Socrates
                     @-->---

mgoodman1989
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since 03-05-2006
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7 posted 09-03-2006 12:41 PM       View Profile for mgoodman1989   Email mgoodman1989   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mgoodman1989

This one is slightly different then your usual style, but again ... refreshing. I admire you Stargal. Different works for you, when most ppl try to break away from the usual ''accepted style'' they seem as tho they are trying to hard. You are one of a kind, and an amazing poet.

Much love,
Michelle

*I love him oh yes I do, he's for me and not for you, and if by chance you take my place, I'll take my fist and smash your face!*

 
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